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littledavid
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0 posted 2008-03-01 08:08 AM



There's one who calls me with his Flute,
Another with his Drum.
And though their Hearts are far apart,
Their Voices are as One.
One lures with me a Coyotes song,
Then says I can not See.
The other beats me with his Drum,
And says, 'don't come to me'!


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littledavid
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1 posted 2008-03-01 08:31 AM


One I follow with my Heart,
The Other with my Ear.
One calls me with his distant Beat,
Flies off  when I come near.

Coyote waits, he knows I'm here,
But he wont let me see.
He taunts me with a Sacred Flute,
He made of PVC.

littledavid
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2 posted 2008-03-01 08:38 AM


Both call me to an Ancient Place,
Where only few can Know,
A Place of Hope and Freedom,
Where I must surely go.

They Sing to me a Shamans Song,
My task is now to learn,
To Hear the Language that they Speak,
So then to pass it on.

littledavid
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3 posted 2008-03-01 09:00 AM


The Prophet has no Country,
No Honor does he seek.
His people are not ready,
To hear him come and Speak.

His visit though, was not in vain,
I found the Seed he lay,
He hid it in a Story,  
Before he went away.

His Story told of many things,
Of them I Dare not speak!
Until he offers up his Words,
To those of us who Seek.

littledavid
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4 posted 2008-03-01 09:09 AM


To those that have no word for Love,
Because they have no need.
Let them know the Drum that beats,
Within them is a Seed.

It will not Die, it never has!
It Lives in every One.
The Crow, the Coyote, and the Man,
Yes,  even in their  Song!

littledavid
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5 posted 2008-03-01 11:04 AM


You said I was mistaken,
That it was not your Drum.
I hoped  it was you,
but I never knew,
You were the Chosen One.

When you asked again,
how I found the Drum.
I really could not say.
If you weren't the One,
and it wasn't your Drum,
Then I had lost my way.

'You must lead a  sad and lonely life',
'You who's name is  Mark.
But It was not he, it was I instead.
Your words had missed Their mark.

It was I who felt your stinging blow,
that grabbed the Wind within.
And forced it from my aching Breast,
and made it Flow again.

Believe me when I tell you this,
I wept, and laughed and roared!
And then a fear took hold of me,
and threw me to the floor!
I knew those words of Power then,
Could come from no mere Man.
I swear upon my Life, Joe Crow,
You are the Chosen One!

littledavid
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6 posted 2008-03-01 11:13 AM


I'll answer now your question,  
how I came to find the Drum.
And why I was so certain,
you were the Chosen One.

I googled up the words you spoke,
unto a brave young Boy.
The words that now have brought me to,
this  place of Hope and Joy.

From here I followed up the link,
that led me to the Drum.
From the Sound of things that came to pass,
I was not the only one.

The ways of trolls, I know them not,
nor would I care to learn.
The Truth I heard, that came from You,
will within me Ever Burn!

So that is why you'll find me here,
And when you ask I'll come.
And sit beside you full of Awe!
And listen to your Drum.

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7 posted 2008-03-01 08:33 PM


I am not quite sure why you broke this up into comments, as there is no rule on length here, but glad I figured out you did and got to read it all.  Enjoyed you use of the flute and drum to make the point.
littledavid
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8 posted 2008-03-01 08:37 PM


I posted it as I wrote it, thats all. Maybe I should have posted it in another area for critism? not sure.
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9 posted 2008-03-02 06:02 PM


Actually that is quite "nifty" that you posted as you wrote it, but usually do you write in Word or another program, then copy and paste to the submission box?  I just think doing it this way you stand a chance of getting it really loose its continuity if someone or two comments in-between you posting the next part?  Well, good luck with that then.
littledavid
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10 posted 2008-03-02 06:35 PM


Is there a way I can go back and edit to put them all in one post or was it an irreversible error?
matronmedusa
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11 posted 2008-03-09 12:51 PM


I love the deep and personal journey you took us on.  

Your poems are very, very good.  I think you should write in a word program or note pad before posting.  I see a lot of broken stanzas and I'm not sure which ones are poems or parts of poems.  It's rather confusing, and I would like to see your full poems in one post.  It would be much easier to reply to!

littledavid
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12 posted 2008-03-10 03:41 PM


matronmedusa,
Thanks for your kind comments. I'll give Word a try.

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