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greeneggs-n-ham Junior Member
since 2007-06-05
Posts 14 |
I wrote this yesterday, literally in about 5 min. If igured that, for 5 min poetry, it was good enough to be worthy of sharing. Watcha think? Control My mind is spinning My head is swirling My vision is blurring I’m loosing control My heart is pounding My emotions are churning My insides are burning I’m out of control My life is swinging My sanity is raging My war is waging I cant find control My foolishness is hiding My soul is crying My pride is dying I can’t have control My faith is arising My fire is lighting My joy is igniting I give Him control |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
wonderful transition in last verse. Joyce |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
If only this could really happen in 5 minutes, wouldn't it be wonderful? I love the poem. Rae |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 greeneggs-n-ham, Big Smiles!!! You are a most delightful rhyme maker. Your name doesn't happen to be Sam??? You know... Sam I am... Forgive me… I grew up reading and adoring Dr. Seuss… well, I still do. Anyway, I'm very happy that you've returned. Understanding that your poem was written in five minutes gave me a better understanding as to why it appeared so rough. Other than that, I thought that the thought or the journey that the poem made from beginning to end was quite complex and I thought that you led us through the complexity of expressing "not my will but Your will be done" quite well. God bless and Welcome back!!! -Bob |
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