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haydenjames
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 164
Antigua & Barbuda

0 posted 2002-10-13 10:45 AM

Unprotected Text

Why hide behind a façade,
Or sieve my words to evade
The truth that brews within made
To expose oneself by pen ink charade

The words I write, so revealing
Leaves naked my thought and feeling
Written without restraint, I’m bleeding
On paper my soul's secrets unveiling
My unprotected text.

not sure about this one but hope you like it or have suggestions.

My poetry is at: http://www.thehayden.org

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-10-13 11:14 AM

Hayden, I like the message...it is very
real and honest....thanx..

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2002-10-13 04:51 PM

Oh, yes you did a good job.
It takes courage to risk our vulnerablity, but write we must, no matter what. Thanks for sharing.

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-10-13 07:30 PM

Ah now Hayden, we could give you the answers, but we would not want to inhibit your search...because it IS so very, very personal...

this is good. Very good!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2002-10-13 08:29 PM

The title "Unprotected Text" intrigued me.

Turned out to be a very clever, and apt, title for this gem of a write! I want more unprotected text from you! tehe I think I'm going to enjoy sharing your journey with you!

Earth Angel

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2002-10-13 09:46 PM

haydenjames - I read it and have no suggestions, I like it just as it is. We do open up on these pages...

BC

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

6 posted 2002-10-13 09:48 PM

I love it just the way it is.

haydenjames
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 164
Antigua & Barbuda

7 posted 2002-10-13 11:00 PM

Thanks sooo much everyone... an I look forward to more soul bleeding in future.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

8 posted 2002-10-14 09:42 AM

The title drew me in, the message kept me reading. We do bleed out our hearts in our words don't we? Great one

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-10-14 09:45 AM

Hayden...this is wonderful!!
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

10 posted 2002-10-14 11:25 PM

This is a very raw write in which you have exposed yourself. I like it.

Dawn

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

11 posted 2002-10-15 03:47 PM

Written without restraint, I’m bleeding
On paper my soul's secrets unveiling
My unprotected text.

Hayden, I think you have captured very well
the feelings that a poet faces when sharing their poetry. This is one that we can all relate to. enjoyed.

El riesgo vive siempre!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

12 posted 2002-10-15 03:57 PM

Hayden, I really like your work. This tells very well how most poets write our feelings down. But, you know what? I think that when people write of the real feelings in their hearts and minds, the work just kind of reaches out to others more. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.

With Love To All,
Ethel...garysgirl

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