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My soul stuck on land
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My soul stuck on land |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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 Okay guys, go easy on me, I poured my whole heart into Rasberry Rain and have come up with nothing since.  So this may not be that great.  My spirit sways With the rythem of the amber waves And I cry out to you The air is so bitterly cold that I am warm And the ocean crys That her skin is frozen And the stars blaze dully, As though they know That I should be on the land That grows smaller and smaller And I cry, And the sky joins me And there is a mad rush Of preperation around me While I stand in the middle of the ocean On my wooden home, With my eyes swelled with tears My soul stuck on land [This message has been edited by Wind (10-27-2002 08:47 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Liz, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love this, I could envision the amber waves like caramel and you yearning to just be swept away from this land tainted with war and sorrows and into your own special Atlantis underneath the waves! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, this is really good. I like the form you wrote the poem in. I don't know much about all the technical parts of poetry and the different types. I do think, though, that I can feel when someone is being real and genuine with their feelings (most of the time, anyway). I truly feel that you are being REAL and GENUINE. So, I like to read your poems. Thanks, too, for the other poem you dedicated to me....."Like A Rasberry Rain". I love it. Gary doesn't have a computer, so I have to send him things through the mail. I know, though, that he will love the poem , too, and the fact that you were inspired to write it by one I wrote for him. In fact, I might just read it to him on the phone tonight when he calls me. Thanks, sweet friend , for sharing your thoughts with us. Love To All, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-27-2002 01:53 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey, I also wanted to tell you that I really love those little smiley graphics so many of you use. I haven't had a computer but for a little over a year, so I don't know all the technical things about computers, either. I have always liked smiley faces, though. They always make me feel the way they're intended to do....make me smile real big!! Especially on a rainy, gloomy day like today. We haven't seen very much Florida Sunshine these last few days. Thanks, Liz. Love To All, Ethel |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is very good, Liz... keep writing!  ~ poetic chipmunk hugsLyra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know the feeling. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Like being frozen by the sun. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Seeing Chippy's reply to my poems make me want to cry. I miss her so much. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
no way? you can bump your own stuff in the archeives? |
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