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Rain Rain Don't go Away
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Rain Rain Don't go Away |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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The cockie stands in barren field to raise an angry fist to sky, he prays today the sun will yield and rain will fall on land too dry - the crop is dead; there is no corn and still he struggles vainly on Akubra'd head in early dawn shows helpless face for plant life gone With bitter tears and curse to sun and beaded sweat upon his brow, his farming days have come undone, he cannot see a future now his valiant fist now raised in curse, as sweat drenched palms are raised in ire the only thing to make it worse, is if the land was scorched by fire And yet he struggles, prays for rain to stop the drought and raise the land he prays for life renewed again, as watering done, is by his hand he listens hard with good intent to will the water from the clouds his land is barren, sear and bent as crops lie dying in dust shrouds The lightenings flash, a drop or two is all the rain this land will see he stares into the sky of blue, "Come on rain!" his fervent plea. The cattle low, and faintest sound of pitter patter can be heard then, he slowly turns around and weeps without a single word As tears run down to blend in rain A silly grin lights up his face there is a chance of life again and one small hope to win life's race then much more rain, in torrents deep to save that stock to breed again although this crop he cannot keep, he lifts his head, gives thanks for rain. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Wow Kethry! What a ride in the storm! I love this one...! Yes! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Superbly done...impeccable rhyme and rhythm, filled with excellent imaging and powerful emotion. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You are in fine form with this winner of a poem! Moving and powerful! EA |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kethry...you are S0000 talented. This is absolutely stunning!!! I loved this story you have weaved into a poem. Thanks, dear friend. Love To All, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-25-2002 10:26 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, A wonderful write and a wonderful read. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is intense perfection... the anguish is felt by the reader... as is the gratitude. Absolutely excellent writing! The weather holds us all in its grip... I had to bail water out of both my car and my apartment last night... while others wither, parch, and pray for moisture. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
God bless the rain we are finally getting some, too... perhaps the drought will break for awhile just to see some grass blades smile... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Kethry, this is so very well-said, sweet friend, you have such amazing talent, we sure could use a rain dance here in Colorado right about now, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kethry, you are an amazing poet. I so enjoyed this story, and how you were able to cause me to feel the anguish and gratitude. Thanks, I really did enjoy reading this. Warmly, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Terrific, Keth...an excellent poem to chronicle the worst drought in Austrailian history.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart, how wonderful and beautiful is this which falls on my soul like the sweet touch of rain upon the dry parched land. How truly splendiferous your writing is. How often have I said YOU are a writer, not just of beauty but of power and real talent? Don’t answer because it is too many for you to count and still you maintain your innocence to how superb you are. The time beloved heart for you to admit that it is not just that I am biased in your favour but that my admittedly excellent taste has not led me into error, you are an amazingly talented writer. And this gem showcases it so well, truly exceptional writing, I love it utterly utterly utterly. And I have not coerced or cajoled anyone to read you they do so because you are the kind of writer that consistently delivers quality work.  Love you always Slushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
Yes, I like the rain tonight. I enjoyed your poem too. Thank you. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh if only I could send some of the rain that's falling here now. There hasn't been a day without rain since I came home and it's storming now and will be worse over the weekend. Stupid isn't it, overhere crops are dying from drowning and overthere they're dying of thirst. Nevertheless Keth, you wrote a beautiful poem again with a perfect flow. TitiaLike scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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