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Don't Look |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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*This is a little poem for my son who finds the frustration of not being able to remember beyond five minutes difficult to bear. Don't look behind the hollow shell To find the man you knew so well He is not here he's gone away Hidden from the light of day Thoughts concealed from light of day The injured brain takes them away Buried deep and held by pain He cannot find the path again Synapses for the path again Are lost within the injured brain And can't be traced, the thought is gone The injury lives on and on Don't look behind the eyes to see The person that used to be he Within the spaces of the brain The character is gone again Each day and night he struggles free Not seeking care or sympathy And everyday is still the same He's lost within this hollow brain In pathways new he'll build again Find a way through all this rain Secure the knowledge he can see Learning in time how to be free Until the time that he does well Don't look for him within this shell Don't look ... Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
In pathways new he'll build again Find a way through all this rain Secure the knowledge he can see Learning in time how to be free Wow, certainly much input here. I think learning how to be free is always on our kids minds. I really can't imagine all their fears. I am satisfied with Don't Look. Thanks much. etoodog |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - very precious write for the little guy, very nice... BC |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart, don’t look now but you’ve written something incredible again. Truly darling heart is it necessary for you to excel in whatever and whichever style you write? I’ll answer my own question yes it is because you cannot write anything that is not superb. Don’t look for the smile inside the word It isn’t there the voice stays unheard The memory trace fades away too fast There is no hope of recalling the past Don’t look for the hope that shines bright It’s fled for fear into the dark of night The hand that reaches out for aid Is not recalled the memories fade Don’t look for clues they fade away The memory’s gone for another day Who knows what is in the memory? And does it hold the key to being free You know I truly love this from you, as always beloved heart it is exquisite, and you are by far too too talented  Love and warm stuff as always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Robert, I am glad you are satisified with don't look. I wasn't going to post it because it is a little personal so thank you for responding. Bill, my son is hardly a little guy, he is 26 although I expect him having an ABI keeps him ever young. Marsha, says she who matches me meaning for meaning and word for word in everything she writes. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kethry, I am dumbfounded and speechless. This is quite a poem. And, as soon as I can figure how to get my bottom chin up off my chest, I can probably say something else. I don't know the background of this but it certainly touched me very, very deeply. What a write! I really don't know what to make of it? It is heart wrenching.. Warmly, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (10-22-2002 11:20 PM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Kethry, I found this very touching. I also don't know the background, but can feel a mother's love throughout this piece. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
as everyone else has stated...heartfelt I know not the background either but I feel the emotions pouring Consider yourself fuzzed |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
regards2you, sorry I didn't mean to flabbergast you. The background is as follows, three years ago my son was assaulted, he was knocked unconcious and he sustained head injuries. he bled into his brain and required emergency life saving surgery. For a long time I was not sure if he would live but he did and now leads a fairly normal if restricted life. He still has problems with memory and sometimes he is not the person I knew but he manages and grows. I have unlimited admiration for him and the way he keeps struggling and winning against the odds. Auguste, thank you, I'm glad the mother love shows through. I love him very much even at times I want to strangle him or me because of the frustration. fuzzyfrazzledfraggle, thank you for seeing the emotion, when I write something personal the emotion is usually locked away behind steel doors. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kethry, thank you so much for the explanation, and didn't mean to have sounded so flabbergasted. You wrote this so well, it was stunning. Twisted my head sideways...is this saying what I think it is, I asked myself. Such a talented writer, you are. I am surely sorry for this trial you are all going through. You are in my prayers. May it get easier to bear. What also does come through and a lesson for us all is your acceptance and surrender and your grace which comes shining through....thank you.Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It takes a loving and courageous Mother to bear with it all and to continually support him.. And he has that in you, Keth hugssss M |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kethry, dear friend, another amazing work you have written here. Your love that is so real and touching is put forth so enormously in this poem. Thank you. In one of your replies, you said that you started not to post it because it was so personal. One of the reasons that I love your poetry is because no matter what the subject, you also show an overwhelming part of yourself in it. In some words of poets, you have to figure out if all of it is their imagination or if they really feel this way. Your work touches my heart every time because I don't have to figure out if it's real....I just know in my heart that it is. May God continue to bless your son in the only way HE can. Thanks again for sharing YOU. Love To All, Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Kethry, what an ordeal this must have been, and continues to be for you all. You've been to hell and back. Hopefully, as time goes by, his memory will improve. In my profession, I have seen miracles happen for those who have had what was considered irreversilbe brain damage. I am praying that this will be the case for your beloved son. Blessings to you all and may I add, that this poem was a beautifully written expression of love for your son. Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhKethry~ The heart of a mother is astounding ... The fortitude to have 'survived' and continue to go forward in his life ... is something your son has been blessed with~ The 'personal' write is truly from the heart of a wonderful mother~  I love you ... and miss you soooooooooo much~ *Huggers* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Whenever I think of love and courage, I'll think of this... It epitomizes both. Amazing write, Kethry! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Kethry dear...this is wonderful....but I can understand his frustration....I can't remember much longer than that either...what was this poem about again?.....oh, and thanks for the gifts.....you're a sweetie |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
regards2you, thanks for coming back to read my explanation, usually it's not bad and love overcomes a multitude of sins and frustrations (as you would probably know.) I am glad you think I'm a good writer, I think and write and sometimes it turns out ok - I tried not writing and I got myself so tied up in knots I learned it is better to write and get it out of my system. Maureen, given that you have been through a bit yourself, I thank you lovely lady garysgirl, Thank you, one of the highest compliments I can give is to say someone's work is real, you have just made my day, my week, my year. Earth Angel, it was not so much an ordeal as a series of unfortunate events and we all coped so it's okay. Thank you for responding with such a positive slant. Marge, I blame you for this, here I was safely locked behind closed doors and you went and broke down my barriers with amazing love. I always knew you were special but you had to go and prove it. I miss you toooo, although whenever I stop to think I can hear your voice in my head. suthern, it's not so hard to do, it's mostly a matter of putting one foot in front of the other and hoping you are travelling in the right direction. Thank you for your ongoing support and for the friendship that spans the miles. Toerag, you're a sweetie too, although I know you like to keep that a secret. *Oops have I just let the cat out of the bag. Now you will have to work extra hard at being outrageous to compensate. be well. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is very special writing, Keth, by an equally special lady. Your writing keeps getting better and better...  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Balladeer, Thank you kind sir, that is a gentlemanly thing to say. One day it will compare with yours and then I can say I was mentored by the great and wonderful Balladeer. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart up you go bumpity bump Bev de bump came out today I thought she had gone away But she still comes out when I call And so I said raise this one tall A poem that is so superb In every sentence every word Let others read of this your victory And let some other soul just see That YOU beloved heart can Write The words that will illume fears night Too often a subject will be too stark When it shows of pain and dark But you, who write with humanity You fill the sight of such as me So Bev de bump just do the deed And send it back to the top at speed You know I love it utterly utterly utterly xxxx As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Keth excellent writing it was very moving indeed. This poem is really one of your best yet You never fail to write well and this is outstanding. Beautiful work, exquisite writing, I have never had to handle anything like that so I would not know, but I can feel though too well, Very well written  love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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