Open Poetry #23 |
The Wind Cries Warning |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Around the eaves and down the dell The wind is whistling this foretell September brings the wind so near To whisper warnings in your ear Across the pond the soft breeze blows And ruffles all the water flows October comes to raise the core Of warnings that have gone before Days of darkness hoar and frost Raise the wind to count the cost As howling now the wind grows fierce To raise its warnings, all ears pierce On the night the dead shall rise Windy warnings fill the skies As gusty breathing tells the tale The spirits rise to weep and wail The wind calls out those caught in fire And gives the warning deep and dire The dead shall dance on winds of fate While comes the warning "It's too late" The wind has risen round the eaves Scattering hope along with leaves Hear the rustling on the sill Is it the wind or other ill? Tapping, rapping on my pane The wind is whispering doom again This is the wind that comes for us Dead spirits rise to join the chorus Shrieks and moans will fill the air The wind warns, and cries despair I hide beneath my covers deep On this one night I will not sleep Lest the wind will take my faith And carry me across the strath Where I will find my soul in freeze No more to feel the sunshine's ease The wind howls loud and I resist As morning comes it will desist I gladly herald glimpse of dawning The wind now drops its hint of warning November brings a trace of snow The wind had died its warnings go I've survived another year The wind in warning I'll not hear Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
very cool. i especially enjoy "whispering doom again" and the dead spirits analogy. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"On the night the dead shall rise Windy warnings fill the skies As gusty breathing tells the tale The spirits rise to weep and wail" Oh Kethry ... I just loved this! Excellent flow and cadence throughout ... and such wonderfully descriptive and shivery phrasing to cut through the mind to such vivid imagery. Just wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhKethry~ I like this sooooooooooo much~ The dead shall dance on winds of fate While comes the warning "It's too late" And for some reason ... these lines 'speak' to me~ Hope all is well on your side of the equator~ Love you, gal~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
majnu, thanks for the positive response, sometime my repetitions are boring but I'm glad you liked the whispered doom Kit, if you enjoyed it I am blessed indeed. Thank you. Marge, if the lines speak to you it means the spirit is still moving on the winds. I am well but missing you desperately. BTW posting your present (small, insignificant but heartfelt) today. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
OOOOHHHH Kethry, this is so good...I'm shivering. I don't know if it's from the chill of the wind, or the chill of the spirits. It kind of made me think of Halloween. Do you all have Halloween in Australia? Thanks for sharing. Love To All, Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, this is so wonderfully haunted, sweet friend, I too know this feeling of warning and it used to depress me so very much but now I kind of just see it as a re-birth and rejuvenation to us all! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I loved this too Kethry..perfect for this time of year..Wind and all.. hugss M |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
garysgirl, thanks so much, I'd like to think you got the shivers because of the peom but it was more likely the weather. Noah, yes I used to worry about the warning, now I just listen and move on, thanks for responding *Heart Hugs* nakdthoughts, I thought it would be perfect weather wise for up north, but down south where I come from we are heading into summer, it's heard to pick the right feeling, I'm so glad you could relate to this one Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart I really love this, and you know as surely as eggs are eggs that I’d say that. Have you any real concept of how truly stunning your writing is? Probably not since although you are remarkable perceptive, you are incredibly blind about the quality of your writing. Its time you paid attention to what I have been saying since time immemorial that your writing is simply divine, read it, acknowledge it, and believe it. And no beloved heart it isn’t me being biased you are really incredibly good, trust me on this. (Yes, I’m well aware that every time I say trust me you immediately don’t) It wasn’t necessarily my fault we got lost, well not every single time it wasn’t, and it wasn’t me who changed the directions from left and right to head west or east was it? You know I truly love this, you really are an amazing poet. Missing you terribly, and do not tell me to aim better, because I’m aiming as well as I can with what is available. Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the earthquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (10-21-2002 10:25 AM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Kethry - this is a wonderful write. I sit here feeling a chill of November winds yet to come. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Keth, I've saved it already! Now, I'll write my reply! I LOVE it! You wrote this so well--and I love the wind! If there's a wind storm, out of the house I go! I head for the lake and raise my arms up to the skies and get invigorated. I even make tapes of the sound of the wind by leaving the window open just a crack so that the sound is amplified. --Gosh, Keth, I really do love this poem!!!! Linda |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Kethry, you've rustled this through October's days very well... Enjoyed this one very much! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marsha, why don't you ever get enthusiastic my work? Thanks love I can ditto all the other sentiments. Nightshade, I don't believe I've seen you around here before. Thanks for stopping by and responding to my work. Earth Angel, I have an affinity for the wind also, I love it when it whistles mournfully around the eaves and I am snug inside. Thank you for your comments. Sunshine, well you know I simply have to give a different slant to halloween. Thanks for reading and responding. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart, okay if you really want me to get enthusiastic I will, you know I always do as I'm told. Truly its good now believe it. as always Slushy always Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the earthquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (10-21-2002 10:29 AM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is gorgeous, Keth... I love the sounds of this piece... I hope you had a good trip back to Australia, where springtime comes in November ~ seasonal hugs Lyra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Giminy Christmas! LOL I should have paid more attention to the title... for I was all prepared for a toast to fall and suddenly found my backbone doing a tapdance of shivers that had nothing whatsoever to do with the temperature! LOL This is absolutely fantastic, Kethry... and going into my library for many future shivers! *G* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Great cadence to this. It's allure would ordinarily be, given the calender, our "celebration" of Halloween, day of the dead, but your locale makes it difficult to disassociate it from the current pain "down under". Hope all is well and I did enjoy. |
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