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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-12-14 02:28 AM



Straw Man


I was lucky
to be endowed
with a degree of intelligence

Enough to enable me
to construct the puzzle
that is my life

Incorporating the clever
twists and turns
neccessary to prevent
the retracing of paths
once taken

But now find myself
in the center
of my self-made maze

unable
to think my way out


Tin Man


I was broken, I guess
at the factory
A product of inferior materials
or poor workmanship

So, right out of the box
and through to this day
I've always felt

that, although I've been
servicable
I never quite realized
what I was meant for

never performed, completely
the function of Human

I must be missing a part


Cowardly Lion


Before I aquired my mettle
bluffed bravado
had always seen me through
the uncomfortable situation

Allowed me to dare
to do those things
I've actually done

But, whenever it counted
or I was counted upon

to do that difficult task
to walk through that dark wood
for the benefit of another

I would tuck-tail
and turn away


© Copyright 2002 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved
Aenimal
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1 posted 2002-12-14 02:32 AM


The many shades of an extraordinary man. Welcome back Ed, your words were sorely missed.
raph

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wranx
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2 posted 2002-12-14 02:36 AM


Thanks Raph,
Feels good to be here, if only for a short while.

Give everyone my best.

Gotta go. (toes)

Ed

Diane Coway
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3 posted 2002-12-14 02:37 AM


Perceptive write.  I enjoyed your words of the straw man, tin man, and cowardly lion.  As in everyone's life things changes....one thing certain is change.
Bravo!!
Bonet

passing shadows
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4 posted 2002-12-14 03:22 AM


what a concept! I love this!
brian sites
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5 posted 2002-12-14 05:12 AM


Ed
sometimes the dark?
sheds more light

this is mining

and you found a diamond

shaking head here.......no more electricity for you
sheesh

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2002-12-14 05:40 AM



 

So?

 

Are you a GOOD witch?

 

or

a BAD WITCH?

Sandpiper
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7 posted 2002-12-14 06:48 AM


creative insight at its finest--enjoyed!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
8 posted 2002-12-14 09:41 AM


Just popped in to say how much I love this!
~Hugs~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

Midnitesun
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9 posted 2002-12-14 10:02 AM


LOL at Karen's reply. Why must you be either? You are not limited except by your own fence.
Have you tried fleece polartec socks? They are warm and wash/dry easily. Don't wear cotton. Wear fleece, or wool if you aren't allergic. Trust me on this one, I've made nearly every mistake in the book learning how to survive Alaska winters, it took several years to figure it out!
OK, enough for now. You need to keep moving if you're not dressed correctly.
SHEESH! Didn't your mommy teach you how to dress? (Mine didn't either.)

garysgirl
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10 posted 2002-12-14 10:12 AM


Hey Ed...good to see you.
Those old toes get the coldest, don't they....and the nose.....
If I can keep my toes and nose warm, I'm okay.
I liked this poem, as I always do with your work...


Try to stay warm, Ed. You've got all our hugs.      

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2002-12-14 10:16 AM


wranx
A clever write, enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2002-12-14 10:27 AM


Well now! Isn't this a clever write!--then again, everything of your's that I have ever read shows that you have been "endowed with a certain degree of intelligence"!!!

~ Have been missing your winsome wisdom as of late. Keeping busy and out of trouble?!?

~ warm hugs
Linda

arthur
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13 posted 2002-12-14 11:32 AM


we have all been one of these some of the time
many of us ,including me ,have been one or the other
most of the time
I like the tin man best
he and I have a fellow feeling
arthur

Corinne
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14 posted 2002-12-14 11:36 AM


Good trio, Wranx. From what I've read, you've got a brain, heart and courage.

Cor

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VAS
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15 posted 2002-12-14 11:42 AM


Oh, my, this is a WOW! We surely all have a bit of each character in us, at times. I've never seen this trio in such a way before. It's a fascinating thought. Not to mention, this poem is marvelously well constructed. Thoroughly enjoyed the read!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

MARK V SHELDON
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16 posted 2002-12-14 12:09 PM


The Wizard


I've been ignored
Behind my curtain
By my own doing

I've led others
To believe in
Themselves
When they had
No one else
But each other

Yet at the end
Of the road
My balloon
Doesn't pop...

It simply drifts away...


(Thanks for the inspire, Ed -- I greatly enjoy your writing voice and p.o.v.'s...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

Duncan
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17 posted 2002-12-14 05:00 PM


But now find myself
in the center
of my self-made maze

unable
to think my way out


I read this poem this morning before work but didn't have time to respond.  I really like how you've done this.  Very new way of looking at a classic theme.

Cpat Hair
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18 posted 2002-12-14 06:30 PM


yeah..I see the few days without electricity gave you plenty of time to think...

very nicely done my friend... a different twist on classic characters that in all of us....

enjoyed

A Tone of Voice
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19 posted 2002-12-15 11:03 AM


how clever you are I really enjoyed this, I always appreciate something a little different......*S*~!


~Atov

~I envy those who have perfected the art of being~

~A~Tov

scorpio
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right...there
20 posted 2002-12-15 11:19 AM


Very clever write...you have a way of drawing us in...Well done..

believe in what your heart feels...

inkedgoddess
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21 posted 2002-12-15 11:27 AM


yes,ed,
good spin on my favorite classic.......
trying to find your way out of oz,
so much in this move,
watched as a kid,
saw as an adult, so many holes, and qu4estions.
like why would dorothy want to return, once whe knew she herself held the key, to fly,
why return to this confining bibble belt?
then again, what do i know?
michele

Honeybee
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22 posted 2002-12-15 02:43 PM



A clever, powerful write in regards to the many facets of a man in dark interlude.
The theme of the Wizard of Oz has long been one of my favourites to read and write about and this is perhaps one of the best I've seen.

It's a keeper!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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