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satan's shadowing
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satan's shadowing |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He saw demons in his room. Three figures passed behind his back. Dressed as druids--hooded monks-- heads in bow with hands in clasp. "I see demons now," he said. "I think that they might want me dead." They've been coming after him-- droning chant of a death hymn. He was shaken. He cried tears-- this man who won't acknowledge fear. You can make them go away... "Help me--I can't live this way." He wanted solace and my shame is that I couldn't trust again. I've never turned my back before-- but I have nothing left to give. So finally--he sees demons-- I wonder what took him so long. I have seen them--in legion-- hatred in his eyes--treason to his tongue that spoke such lies-- I, too, see demons, in his eyes... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-17-2002 02:19 AM).] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 Wow. So finally--he sees demons-- I wonder what took him so long. I liked these lines. Very strong. The whole poem was strong, but these lines especially, to me. I, too, see demons, in his eyes... And of course, this line. I like that it ends with '...' I don't know why, it just seems right.  Truly amazing. Kielo I need to change my signature. :D |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Well done!! But very scary...this is a REAL Halloween story... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, witch I've got my own damn demons, but mine don't seen quite as.......insistant ~Ed |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Wow, I love this, sweet friend, I know this feeling all too well as I have fought thiese demons ever so well and yearn to push them out of my mind always and re-decor myself in rainbow wallpaper! (sigh) This will make an excellent haunting Halloween poem, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light alwyas shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Very powerful... creepy, evil. Eeeuuu! And, so true to life. Very well written. ~he wanted solace and my shame~ that line alone speaks volumes, as does the entire poem. I didn't know you knew my ex-husband! lol, he would laugh, too, for he got rid of his demons, and somehow we both survived, and were set free. Amazing! I like this. Insightful. Warm Regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes well done... looking underneath the surface story tells one a great deal...and nothing... always a pleasure witch.. even when the write is unsettling... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Appears you witnessed a possession. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Feed them to the dragon. He loves demons. :squeeze> |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Great work....enjoyed very much. DeaDiAmore |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Halloween, nothin'. This is the story of realizing betrayal, and he realizing his betrayed... |
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