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Kethry
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Victoria Australia

0 posted 2002-12-05 03:30 PM


We are a generation
feeding from the trough
of indifference
left behind by the carnivores
that are socialised to rend our mind

All is dissection, in the examination of strata
and the layers of emotion that cover us
also bring about our doom
we struggle against the layers around us
from earth that presses in and destroys us,
moulds us the image of acquiescence
until the indifference of conformity
is all that is left to feed upon.

Biafran  hollow, we swallow the stones of gall
biding our time in the shadows
waiting for the day when we come into the light
into the power of our own being
and we feed on the crumbs of indifference
holding them tight to our breast
offering the nurture of passion
that is refused,
time and time again.

Our minds scream for change
yet the stratus of indifference are embedded
in our history, in our memory
we are hungry for the winds of change
that blow across the desolation
and yet change nothing -
and we howl to the darkness
as our hunger goes unsatiated
while the layers of indifference
feed us as they bury us.

Though we feed from the trough of indifference
it shall not become our meat, our daily bread
we shall not be conformed to it
instead we shall change the food, grain by grain
into energy that causes us to rise up
and shake off the strata of history
to reconfigure ourselves, to fit the new age

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



© Copyright 2002 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Drifter
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1 posted 2002-12-05 03:48 PM


This highly cerebral piece is one that deserves to be focused on for understanding in stages.  In my few reads I am moved to consider more carefully the bread of life of which I pertake.  I feel that you speak to the readers motivating conscious, and challenge us to seek a certain depth in that which we choose to be of and associated with.  I guess I'm moreso saying how your work speaks to me.  It succeeds in sowing a seed of question for the appearent, as well as presenting a personal challenge to feed my soul the grains of true substance.
Kethry
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Victoria Australia
2 posted 2002-12-05 03:51 PM


Drifter,
Right on!
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Aenimal
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3 posted 2002-12-05 04:09 PM


Well said. I Really liked this piece. A it's a topic that's been on my mind quite a bit lately. Love the words and always love Aussies. Now if you'll excuse me I'm going to go drown my boss in one of those troughs.


raph

Marsha
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4 posted 2002-12-06 09:19 AM


Keth beloved heart NOW this is not only truly excellent writing, but the subject matter is heart-wrenchingly accurate. Never ever do you write something that isn’t magnificent, but sometimes you write something that leaves me gasping at the sheer brilliance of its write. I almost might say this was a write of might, might being power, not perhaps, there is no perhaps about this exquisite poem. I cannot understand why it hasn’t garnered a million and one replies, unless it is too honest and powerful for some to comprehend, but more probably it is simply that it was posted at a time when it fell too quickly and I wasn’t in to raise it high. Not that I’m the only one that does so but, sometimes it is necessary for me to hunt out the gems of your soul and bump them, so now bumpity bump up to the top you go.

You know I love this utterly utterly utterly and YOU darling heart are a writer of really beautiful lines of truth, this is superbly done. Exquisite wring bwloved one utterly utterly utterly exquisite


Love and warm stuff
As always
slushy



Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2002-12-06 09:36 AM


I enjoyed the language here... and your thoughts. Lots to consider in what you are presenting and since it is to some degree philosophical in nature one could open up a long debate thread as to whether they are in total agreement or not. I will same in general you touched on a lot of areas that are important in understanding the world we are in and how we want the future of it and ourselves to be shaped.
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Corinne
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6 posted 2002-12-06 11:15 AM


Bravo, Bravo!

Wonderful work, Kethry!

Submit this one for publication!

Cor

Salty
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since 2002-11-23
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7 posted 2002-12-06 11:49 AM


instead we shall change the food, grain by grain........ *MOST EXCELLENT* making much needed changes one step at a time.


~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-12-06 11:51 AM


Keth,
You openned Pandor's box. Now what? Enjoyed

Sandpiper
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9 posted 2002-12-09 06:51 AM


A "thinker"--well done!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Krissy
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since 2002-02-22
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kent England
10 posted 2002-12-09 04:44 PM


Keth wonderful writing it was very sad indeed. Outstanding work, and something to think about isn’t it.
Very well written


love and warm stuff
as always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

coyote
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

11 posted 2002-12-09 11:50 PM


"and we howl to the darkness
as our hunger goes unsatiated
while the layers of indifference
feed us as they bury us."

Very "Beat", Kethry.

From one who howls across the void.

Thanks,
coyote

"The greatest of all faults is to be conscious of none."
Thomas Carlyle

Balladeer
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12 posted 2002-12-10 12:30 PM


I got hungry just reading this one, Keth!
garysgirl
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13 posted 2002-12-10 01:27 AM


Very well-written, full of truths....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Paul Wilson
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14 posted 2002-12-10 02:50 AM


Kethry~ Enjoyed...Paul

Hungry for change But afraid of the consequences.
Change we must if we are to survive.

" To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you "

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
15 posted 2002-12-10 01:25 PM


Please! I don't eat out of troughs! I'd be so offended, if I wasn't so apathetic about it all, at least on my top layer. Underneath, well, who knows?

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Toerag
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Ala bam a
16 posted 2002-12-10 02:50 PM


Wonderful job Keth....
RSWells
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17 posted 2002-12-10 03:06 PM


Something in the wind....for those who won't lie down.....enjoyed this hopeful indignation.
Bill Charles
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18 posted 2002-12-10 08:11 PM


Kethry - sometimes I wonder when was the best time to be around...

BC

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