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Cassie Junior Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 32 |
You mean the world to me If you can only see That my love is deeper then the sea You are my everything I feel as if I can tell you anything You are my sunshine on a rainy day When the sky gets gray You make me feel that everything is okay You are my all Together we will never fall You make me feel warm inside You I do confide And my love will never subside You give me pride And changed me inside With you by my side I know you will provide |
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Ice_Queen Junior Member
since 2002-12-04
Posts 29Delaware, USA |
While I appreciate the efforts behind this poem, I gotta say I think the rhymes are...overused, and alot of the phrases have become...cliche. Sorry for being harsh. Some advice, from someone who used to be the same way, and still is occasionally...Buy a Thesaurus, and stay away from pop music. |
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Cassie Junior Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 32 |
I am just expressing my true and honest feelings. And you shouldn't assume. I don't listen to pop. Thanks for being honest. |
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