Open Poetry #23 |
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Untamed Minutes |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
Untamed Minutes The sun is slanted now and threads stitch it to tall buildings. Far, a crow sits wire and scans the ground for acorns. The rain sent crinkled leaves into the lane where a baby just learning to walk purposely places a bare foot onto the soggy of it and looks down with interest. The cold comes fast to dusk and her sweater is green, like eyes that warm a room. She has bloomed beautiful with the watching of this child’s wonder, who sits on the pile and picks up a golden fold of time. The sun takes root in the darkening hills and grows magenta clouds behind the palm trees. |
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Ice_Queen Junior Member
since 2002-12-04
Posts 29Delaware, USA |
This was interesting. I normally don't like poetry of this style, but this created a clear image of sight and touch. It made me think of a really great still life painting. Great way to catch the moment. Groovy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sometimes I think you look at the world through crystal-faceted eyes... Yep. You do. ![]() |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Just once sweet Martie... I would love to see the world through your eyes. Beautiful write m'friend. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Goodness, Martie...what a beautiful picture that you painted here in my mind's eye. I love it. ![]() "Love makes the world go around" |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
So that is the kind of glasses you wear? Crystal Faceted? Shoulda known!!! Your imagery is so impressive....IWIHWT!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You rain beauty on a canvas. ![]() |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The rain sent crinkled leaves into the lane where a baby just learning to walk purposely places a bare foot onto the soggy of it and looks down with interest. The cold comes fast to dusk and her sweater is green, like eyes that warm a room. She has bloomed beautiful with the watching of this child’s wonder, who sits on the pile and picks up a golden fold of time. =========================== its in those minutes that bonds are formed and memories are made...I knew she would be a source of inspiration for you..and you her...yeah.."grandma" looks real good on you ![]() ![]() |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
the sun takes root? Martie, you are so creative! Who, but you could come up with something like that... the rest of the poem is just as amazing. so enjoyed this... Hugs and love. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling...at the wonders beneath that baby's feet. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (sigh) Awwwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I just love this, you always bring colors to all your words, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie~ There is still no one who writes a canvas quite like you. This is so beautiful, my friend. I absolutely love it. ![]() Hugs, ![]() ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Ohhhh, so enjoyed a snapshot from your mind--excellent! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
wonderful poetry Martie but you just always do that - isn't it fun to watch those little feet search and discover - it is amazing the wonderful images you see and paint with your words - Paul |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Martie, when you paint, you paint with such beauty. She is a diamond shining in your eye. Just lovely. Hugs. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I love the child-like wonder of your poetry. The wide-eyed innocence of it! ~ good morning hugs to you dear Martie! Linda |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GrandmaMartie~ And the wonder of it all is that you capture the word-play for all eternity~ Love it ... but this .... this enthralled me .... 'The sun is slanted now and threads stitch it to tall buildings.' Yeppers ... now THAT I can see~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Aren't baby steps just the cutest thing? ![]() The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is almost overwhelming in its beauty, Martie. It is certainly a keeper! May I? May I share with a few e-mail friends? Your name would definitely remain with it!!!!! As always!!!!! I am in awe. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The sun takes root in the darkening hills and grows magenta clouds behind the palm trees I took a picture minus the palm trees just last week..of a magenta sky...it was beautiful thank you for reminding me hugss M |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My goodness! I watch, read and I learn, thank you Martie. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Great images. As always tender handed. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, it is always a pleasure reading you m'friend. What a beautiful moment you have penned.. I loved every single line. adding to my library. Maree ![]() |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I thought this was about my son's cell phone bill.....Nice and interesting write.. |
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