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Looking back |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I stood on Leroy’s front step And knocked It had come to me that He was selling ice cream And other substances From his Good Humor truck Also, that he had taken up With Lynn, the ex-wife Of another friend, Bill Who’s wedding I had attended Worked with, drank with, Gave his first taste of Ganja And now was living With a short quiet woman Named Hanna Whose sister Holly, I would meet years later And date for awhile Unaware of the relation Of only her claim That she was descended From the infamous inquisitors Cotton and Increase Then one day she asked me If I knew of that Bill Whom she said that she hated Who had become Junkie Along with her sister Now dead from addiction (How she wished it for him) Leroy’s door exploded inward As two dark-suited men Kicked it in with a crash Without breaking stride With no glance toward me I decided it best, To walk away quietly Without looking back [This message has been edited by wranx (12-03-2002 08:34 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Good time to walk away...but the connections are always only a few degrees removed, no matter how far we go. nicely told... concise and insightful |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
For some odd reason I can't remember my first taste of Ganja?...I do remember who I got it from though?...interesting write Wranx |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx And the river flows on. Enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know this story...I know it so well, I shouldn't even be this curious about the ending, but somehow I YAM. ssigh... circles. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very interesting...much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are the ultimate storyteller, Ed, a modern day bard in a very small band. I'm smelling a familiar scent in this vignette. Yes, it is best to exit backstage quietly. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sounds like any other day in the interesting life of our intriguing Wranx! You do always make me want to read more! ~ Remember what your mother always said, "Now Ed dear, always remember to keep your back covered!" lol Linda |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, Ed, you know that we want to know what the ending is !?!  I think you know, too, that you are VERY, VERY good at telling these. Sometimes I can't figure out what part is written from your imagination and what part is written from your participation.....  But, that's signs of a talented poet, huh? "Love makes the world go around" |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
it's a small world after all it's a small world after all it's a small world after all it's a small small world |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Ah! I hate that song. Very good poem, you captured my attention from the very first line. WinterWren |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Inter-connectivity ,Synchronicty coincidence? Whatever you want to call it, it made for another great poem. Thanks for sharing another gem. raph |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks for the reading of this convoluted little tale. Sadly, there is no fiction here. And the ending? Sits here at the keyboard. I never saw, or heard from any of these people after I stepped out of their lives. Ed |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Enjoyed the story, Wranx, though chilling at the end. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I like...you were there, stories. This one read/rang very true. Very visual. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
riveting write...it drew me in at the start and held me to the end...well done.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Not pleasant, but well described. An involving cinematography of words... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...James |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Always love the glimpses you give us. |
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