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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

0 posted 2002-11-26 11:10 AM

If love would take only time
If you only see
What loves means to you?
If you only could see
How the days are going?
Going slowly to the point
Where you only see ways
To reach your heart
If you only think of
finding love
For your heart
Every minute your heart beat
faster
When whole world Is in your hand
Can you find a way
To your love?
If you only be srtong
Enough to lift up your faith
In love
never taken time away
Where you never go wrong?
If you only see
How many hours are there?
To take your heart away
If you only see
Into this burning sun
Knowing the clouds are hiding
The sun
If you only see

[This message has been edited by vandana (11-27-2002 10:05 AM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-11-26 11:14 AM

enjoyed.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2002-11-26 11:16 AM

Hello Vandana! Nice to see you again.
Yes, if only one could really see past the clouds, and see the sun of Love.
Enjoyed.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-11-26 11:19 AM

(sigh) Oh Vandana, I believe to always know the sun is shining behind the clouds with the warmth of love is truly a blessing, I wish for loves smile to always peak from beyond there to you! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2002-11-26 05:04 PM

Very nice...James

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

5 posted 2002-11-26 11:18 PM

Nice to read and see your wisdom through your poetic passages. I would tweek some of the lines where the syntax or grammar can be improved for example "finding love to your heart" to me should read "finding love for your heart", "every minute of heart beat faster", sounds better if written as every minute your heart beats faster...just a suggestion

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-26-2002 11:23 PM).]

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