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Shadow children |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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not allowed to exist, Pushed into the dark, aleys of pain on all sides, banished from hope and dreams, yet don't make a remark The sunlight may glimmer above, yet they cannot see it A spot of blackness in a world of light From the crimes some commit Shadows that follow behind strangers, begging for sypathy. Some deserve what they get, But some should be free. Some made mistakes, time was unforgiving. but what about the children? who can rarely go on living I hate hearing stories, I know not what is true, but there is so little a shadow child can do. Why should they suffer from parent's mistakes? While some children are spoiled With candy and cakes. I know I am thankfull for so many things, but what about the children That need guiding wings Living in a box, Is no way to live at all, And to think I'm in pain, Whan I fail or take a fall. For the truth is you see, We all make mistakes, But that gives us no right To complain of our aches, because no matter how bad, Your life may feel, After a while, Most poeople will heal. But what about the children Because yes, they are real Never be normal! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Liz, this is a very mature poem for a person of your age....Well done..and very poignant... Let the winds blow and speak the words of one's heart... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Liz, I am always astounded by your depth and wisdom...such a great and power piece here. ThisDiamond |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Wow! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Your writing has much depth and wisdom for someone so young. Nicely penned! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... a good deal of wisdom in the words... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Liz, What a kind, loving young woman you are. This is wise and thoughtful. For whatever it is worth, I am one of those children, and I made it quite nicely. Though we start way, way, way in the back of the pack, I think we are often given some special drive to succeed in survival, plus much more... ...just a thought... The above paragraph is why I like your poems for they cause me (and others, I am sure), to think and feel. Much talent you have. Thank you for sharing it with us. Hugs and warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Liz, this is so very heartbreaking but true, sweet friend, no child should ever be unloved, ignored, or denied, as they need to be fondled and loved so they can grow and not repeat the mistakes of our fathers! (sigh) God Bless all the children of the world, sweet friend, you have a true golden heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I cannot believe how wise you are for your age...this is awesome! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Well, little Liz, you've done it again.... Like the others have said, you write with wisdom way beyond your years, little friend. You do amaze me with your poems. Such talent you have. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
This poem is wondeful!...yes children are real, I know, My mom runs a daycare, they are very real and very loud. -Joe- |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
A very painful read, thank you for giving those children a voice. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your heartbeats are heard far away, Miss Wind. Thank you for lifting the shadowed voices up, to give them a gentler ride, up and out of the alleyways. And thank you for sharing unconditional love. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Sad fact in an insane world--well done!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
i havent been here for a while, been so busy doing assignments, but i'm so glad i'm back, and reading another thoughtful poem from someone who has knowledge of herself, and the world around her. inspiring and thought provoking as always. lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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