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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2002-11-20 12:22 PM

What I imagine
is the young woman
who saw the world as sun-gold.
She pushed soft pathways into sand
then curled with the sea
as footprints vanished;

or a night fully illuminated
by moonrise
skipping on whitecaps;
when she was cursed
on the cliffs of loss,
blue with waning songs
of virginity;

she embraced the chill,
her crimson-stained clothes
left to rot on rocks,
to the sea, the blackened sea -
dressed fine
in vines of seaweed,
a mermaid of the moon.

© 2002 CM Bailey

for Carla

[This message has been edited by Corinne (11-20-2002 12:25 PM).]

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-11-20 12:29 PM

First of all, I loved the word you coined, "Lunation"--and it worked well as the title.

This was very stirring and you truly are a "mermaid of the moon".

Excellent piece of poetic writing!

Linda

Eliza
Member

since 2002-11-18

Posts 58

2 posted 2002-11-20 12:29 PM

For Carla...

from a person who knew
and shares the trust.

Beautiful.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2002-11-20 03:01 PM

Thank you Linda and Eliza!

Cor

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-11-20 03:59 PM

(smiles) Oh Corinne, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, I imagined the girl like a mermaid and happily with a s ile of innocence in her heart jumping into the abyss of her dreams! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is magical, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

5 posted 2002-11-21 10:33 AM

Thank you, sweet Noah!

Corinne

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

6 posted 2002-11-21 10:33 AM

Corinne...."...pushed soft pathways..." a lovely phrase. As always, nicely done. Bob

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2002-11-21 10:36 AM

yes.. I must echoe Bob here. Loved that phrase.

very nicely done indeed...

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2002-11-21 12:48 PM

Corinne

Lovely mood in this...ethereal.

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

9 posted 2002-11-21 12:59 PM

considering the dedication and eliza's response, i fear a darker backstory to this than i dare ask.

the images were beautiful, but like all the old songs traced with sadness and loss, although not necessarily unhappiness.

thank you for an escape.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2002-11-21 01:03 PM

Corinne
So many good lines I couldn't pick one.
Excellent write.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

11 posted 2002-11-21 05:29 PM

Thank you all for your lovely comments!

Yes, this has a dark side to it. About a friend I lost many years ago...

Thanks again,

Corinne

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

12 posted 2002-11-21 06:12 PM

Corrine, this is beautiful, with a touch of sadness.
You can write such heart-touching poetry, Friend.
Thank you so much for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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