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Ten Years and One Day
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Ten Years and One Day |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Ten Years and One Day Seems like yesterday, when that phone call came, and you were out of pain, but I still hear your voice, not so much a whisper but more in the words that form my own chords, and of course you visit me in your green eyed wrinkles in the morning’s mirror… you were never a morning person, no never… you didn’t even want to see breakfast looking back at you, so I’d morning with father, with an every now and then when we’d giggle loudly over how he could make you talk in your sleep… ten years and one day ago, you left me for him, and Him, and even though I have a brother and a sister, I thought then We’re orphans, even though just when a child loses a mother or a father, they are not really, unless they are very young… what is it about parenthood and childhood that they intermingle so well, and a brief morning sky can whisk you back and forth between adult and child when you look over, wanting to take a hand whether you reach down or up, you just want that hand to hold on to, one more time and say “Look! See!” and smile up or down into the face of the one God gave you… no mistakes there… so as I look back on my morning seeing the fountain trying hard to tap into the sky with tears falling up, I realize that I had waited to see if the first day after ten years would be any different. Nope. I only miss you more. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dearest Karilea - it doesn't matter what amount of time has passed, we miss our parents as if they left us yesterday. This is a beautiful, heartfelt write. understanding hugs to you, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
the sad beauty of morning mixed with bittersweet memory. damn, now i'm gushing. you are remarkable in form, but the raw emotion you put into your free verse, and this peice in particular, really stands me on my head. my thanks for the share, and everlasting condolances. -majnu -------------------------------------- Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet. [This message has been edited by majnu (11-19-2002 10:48 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Karilea... this piece is so touching that I have tears in my eyes... I don't think anyone ever forgets the way their parents loved them... and I don't think we ever get over losing them either  ~ many loving hugsLyra |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh so very lovely and caring Karilea, and how I envy those who can write of such beauty in the sky reminding them of their parents, as some lived in the eye of the storm. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (11-19-2002 11:07 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karilea, this also brought tears to my eyes. Even though I still have both my parents, I know if they leave this world before I do, I will miss them as long as I do live. I'm very close to my parents and I hate the thought of losing either one of them. Thank you, Karilea, for sharing your heart in this poem. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"you just want that hand to hold on to, one more time and say “Look! See!” and smile up or down into the face of the one God gave you… no mistakes there…" ============================================ ...and this is where my own tears welled up.. thank you for this keeper sweet poetess. ~Knowing Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sunshine~ Your words pull at my heart. The years of heartache will not end A lifetime of memories to comfort you my friend |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I lost mine when I was ten, and though that was almost 23 years ago, it does seem like yesterday sometimes. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Beautiful poem of love and remembrance... ...believe what your heart feels... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea You caught me with my own "tears falling up".  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea A wonderful and sensitive write, enjoyed. |
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