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Carving Shadows
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Carving Shadows |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
absinthe sounds great like driving a sports car through a large plate glass window the female passenger oblivious to anything other than your advances I realized on the way to the liquor locker that not even the silverworms who slop mercury through my veins can poison my drive to succeed ..some time later…… The edges of the frame are starting to fuzz igniting a tempered resonance between soundstages both here and imagineered these justifications and pageantry are just ulcers to fuel my vertigo like rust on chrome Candlewax riverbeds collect on the littered glass tabletop nowhere to flow but over the edge I explain to the shadows that I am feeling rather tight quite cockeyed in fact and that Dos Passos and Hemingway were men who understood the charm of self-degradation Stumbling into the hotel garden I steady myself with a seat under the terrace fill a pipe and watch the rain fall through the nightlife |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
wow, wonderful read. |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
thanks, reading other peoples stuff here Im beginning to wonder if mine isnt a bit too off the wall, comparitevly |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Wow, oh Steven, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, your talent is incredible and I just love your descriptive notions! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Drexler, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
not off the wall at all, everyone has a different perspective and we learn that way. Nice write...what I call "mood poetry". |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
ah yes, and then we have to clean up the shavings--like your style! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to read this one again  |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
Wowzer...i'm applauding to the beat ~only~ the nightlife people can hear, I did enjoy this one~~! ATOV~! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... imagery that jsut touches the edges of surreal...like that buzz...not quite but enough.. enjoyed |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Candlewax riverbeds collect on the littered glass tabletop nowhere to flow but over the edge I explain to the shadows that I am feeling rather tight" you write so intense....not off the wall at all. I really like this  |
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