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O, This path...
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O, This path... |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
Candidly startled... than hushed... Forgive me, if this seems rushed But I feel so lonely now (melancholy airs, all around) I know, I know, I know (No one will ever know) This road is a lonely road (No one can ever know) I feel I am to be alone...~ hypnotic visions enrapture me, my darling~ (O, the fury of this chase...) So alone, on this road (you cannot know this hidden path I search to sleep) Faraway echoes bellow hollowness into awry undulations (in you) I’m so alone (fallen, I am ) It’s going to be ok. (you will know one day, my friend.) Though these tears can’t stop falling, My soul is calling... It told me so... I know, I know. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
O...this is beautiful... your words fall down the page like a melody.. with harmonies floating them back up.. the repetative "I know" was the perfect touch...and those closing rhymes... poetry in motion.... a lovely affirming write Poetess Sparkles  No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
The way you have written this is very unique and beautiful. I like it. Thanks for sharing with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OH!! WOW!! This is one fantastic write! ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
Thank you all so much! I am honored! |
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