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Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

0 posted 2002-11-18 11:20 AM

Moonlit dawn fills the room
As you slip away
Candles full of dripping wax
Remind me of our play
The smell of you still lingers in
The pillow case I hold
My ears still ring of love words
Sing and of stories told of old

The youth in me is released
When I think of your return
A meal, a feast will be in wait
For calories you will burn
A drink in etched glass goblet
Will moisten your parched lips
When next we meet I'll greet you
with the magic of my kiss

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2002-11-18 11:47 AM

Very nice
I think this fits in well with my poem of today
The first of small group,
Where mine takes the view of the warrior that leaves
Yours is of the lady that waits.

Enjoyed it

Gloom

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

2 posted 2002-11-18 12:18 PM

hehe those magical kisses are the best ones ,arent they?

CSKpoet
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since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

3 posted 2002-11-18 12:59 PM

I love the meter in this. I know of another poet who writes mostly in this rhythmn ..it's just wonderful
thanks I enjoyed your write immensely
aloha,Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2002-11-18 01:18 PM

Deliciously sensual, alluring..

Sounds like an invitation that would be eagerly accepted again and again.....

EA

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2002-11-18 01:22 PM

'The smell of you still lingers in
The pillow case I hold'

I love this passage the most, outside of food or things foul the sense of smell is often forgotten. But what a trigger of memories and emotions it is. Beautiful poem!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-11-18 02:09 PM

Connie, this is a beautiful love poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

7 posted 2002-11-19 02:30 PM

I love the feel of this one, Connie...
Very romantic...

~ loving chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

8 posted 2002-11-19 02:36 PM

Very romantic poem, Connie...much enjoyed

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2002-12-15 05:05 AM

very nice...love burning those calories!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2002-12-15 08:32 AM

Smiling at the way you burn those extra holiday calories. Well done, nice rhythm to this.

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

11 posted 2002-12-15 05:31 PM

Zinsser - kisses of magic, the best kind...

BC

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

12 posted 2002-12-15 08:34 PM

enjoyed

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

13 posted 2002-12-20 02:43 PM

Thanks.... : )

~~ Connie ~~

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