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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Sure that body molecules find their way back into layered soils into the stuff that makes living things which exchange gases into the atmosphere to make earth different from Mars. Sure that totem poles continue to be hoisted descendants fervently erect carved testimonies their spirits record journeys in dance and chants as everyday man records journeys to daytime jobs. Sure that solar system are bigger than we thought? that sightings of outer planets continue to pour in and our molecular stuff oozes back into other life forms spirits record their endless journeys under orbital guidance and office man forever rotates through revolving doors. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-15-2002 01:02 AM).] |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I think you’re trying to say something very deep here, Perhaps in a bit too bulky of a way. Sure that body molecules find their way back into layered soils into the stuff that makes living things which exchange gases into the atmosphere to make earth different from Mars. Body bits, Molecules that in us all fits, Drifts back into the layers soil In which we struggle and toil, Each breath taken so dear Mingles with the atmosphere That layers deep twinkles the stars To make Earth different from mars. No offense is suggested by my rewrite, I only am using it as an example of what I meant. To lighten up a heavy subject matter. Gloom |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome work Cold hands means a warm heart |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thanks Prof. Gloom, had to refer to the recycling of body parts on several occasions..but the point was not the distintiveness from other planets..any way to much info in too little space I guess. loner, thanks for sharing |
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