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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2002-11-13 07:38 PM

In from the desert sun,
eyes adjust to darkened rooms,
houses of eternity.

We trace patterns
of shredded petals,
blue lotus buds
and papyrus bells,
interlaced
by crackled vines
of time.

Hieroglyphs of
birds, scarabs, legs -
dizzying,
layered in meaning.

Familiarity creeps,
imbues cells
with a trickle
of memory.

Outside,
a coral, dusky sky.
Shadowy arms reach -
dry, bony fingers
of an olive tree.

Cross-legged on sand,
reflection of dreams
are preserved in sleep.

© 2002 CM Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (11-15-2002 12:10 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-11-13 07:58 PM

(smiles) Oh Corinne, you've sad it all so well: familarity! Like this cradle of civilization dreams are preserves that remain mummified deep in our hearts after so long and only come back to life! (kiss on cheek) This is delightful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-11-13 08:06 PM

Beautiful.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2002-11-14 12:50 PM

Corinne.....so mysterious....and beautiful. "Familiarity creeps"...excellent. Bob

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2002-11-14 01:05 PM

I felt a chill within the warmth of this time capsule.
But I'd really like my bones to remain, undisturbed, wherever I leave them....which will probably be as dust over the Rockies or in the waves of the Pacific.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-14-2002 03:13 PM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-11-14 01:28 PM

Corrine, I love to read your poetry. Thanks for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-11-14 03:21 PM

.."houses of eternity".......

Must save!

EA

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2002-11-14 10:05 PM

Corinne

I almost felt like I needed to whisper this reply, in caves, or pyramids, the tombs well said.

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

8 posted 2002-11-14 11:12 PM

ok - i REALLY liked this one and would like to offer one minor bit of critique? - change the title. i think the whole would be even more powerful if one is left drawing that conclusion by themselves... and believe me, they will. the overtones are so vivid that one can't help but see the sand and stone, heiroglyphs and sarcophogi. very well done Cor - an A+

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

9 posted 2002-11-15 12:12 PM

Thanks everyone!

Christopher - very good call! I changed the title to "A Glimpse."

Hope you like.

Cor

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