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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-11-13 12:54 PM

Wasted and
bringing
up all of those memories
into the porcelain
I lay myself
open to regret.
Tell me deary, do you
think I’ll ever really
get over it?

Though my colour’s great
and the French broad tells
me I’ve never looked
better...
[She doesn’t know.]

Circling
linguistics -
another little tornado of mine.
And so I say!
Tell me Sharon,
why isn’t this an issue?
[Give me reason to suspect
the holy man
lied - once again/
his charade
of
no name semi-sweet
chocolate chips].

My lips are burning
and so dry - I’m
parched.
This soul is
withering out
and the teeth
are rotting to the core.
Smile baby,

another secret to swallow.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-13-2002 12:56 AM).]

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-11-13 01:10 AM

Okay, I'm back. I honestly dont' know what to say to your poetry anymore

I wish I did, but I dont'... that's a good thing though hehe. Don't ever stop writing, Jenn, it's your place in the world. No one can take it away from you

I am a Knight who says Ni!

[This message has been edited by Skyfire (11-13-2002 04:31 AM).]

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

2 posted 2002-11-13 01:11 AM

sad.
and all over the place.

who is sharon? its the one solid thing in the poem - a proper name.

sad. but affective.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-11-13 01:14 AM

and yet if i explained it all, it would make perfect sense.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-11-14 04:05 AM

Jen~
Yes...If you explained it all, it WOULD make perfect sense.
This is another excellent piece, Jen.
There is so much depth of emotion and meaning in this
and so much of YOU as well.
I'm very glad you shared this with us...and with me.
I'll be watching for lots more.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2002-12-29 10:40 PM

I read. I thought. I can not speak.

Brilliant.

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2003-01-09 12:27 PM

A snake with teeth,
eating its own tail.

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