Open Poetry #23 |
inner thoughts revealed by rain |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
synchronized titter-tattle raindrops prattle on tin roof hammering a pattern's spell-- heaven is now raining hell-- within I'm safe and warm--aloof. Patterns even in the rain... watch it stop and start again. I look at light beneath monsoon, and swear there is a watered moon. A satellite has gravity, just different from what's supposed to be... not free to bound the plains of mars, but shackled in a cavity. Tell me that my rhyme is wrong. Parse my syntax, critique the song... But poetry is my release. I do know why the caged bird sings... * * * With a tip of the hat to Ms. Angelou: http://www.oreenscott.com/mayaangelou.htm [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-11-2002 10:24 PM).] |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
never would I critique the song of a caged wren how a little bird can fill a world |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Karen, there are a plethora of talented poets here, but, very few write with the pinache, clever expression and intensity as you do. Although uninentional I often relate and find pieces of myself in your words and you always take me back to memories and emotions that still move or haunt me. It's hard to say how I relate to this because it just blows me away, but, just know that I do relate, hopefully that's enough~ Yes, I'm keeping this~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Y'know...you only read the best... I'm so glad we have back pages to rest in... I love uncovering treasures... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Pinache, that's the word, excellent write. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Serenity, another one of your lil gems to tuck away. Well done Karen! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Serenity Blaze ~*~ You have chutzpah You have balls Your rain of word's like Niagara Falls You speak the truth You speak your mind Your poetic works Are quite a find You are unique You've found your niche Rein not your words On edit's leash You spill your guts You share your thoughts Your poetic works Are respected lots Sometimes you write With rhyme and reason Then off you go 'Tis hunting season You hold my interest With your sage mots You make me laugh With your derry o's Be they simple And in-your-face Be they ranting Or full of grace Your poems delight And make one think You fill the gaps You're the missing link! ~*~ Earth Angel [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (12-01-2002 10:21 AM).] |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
But poetry is my release. I do know why the caged bird sings... Perfect! LOVE THIS. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mybri.... lucky for this little bird that someone taught her to love jazz...tweety tweet woo beep a loo blop bam...(scat chirping yanno) (psssst. it's okay, nobody saw that)DIDJA FOLKS? Melissa...I am humbled by such grand praise, and the only thing that bothers me about your work is that you don't post often enough lady! Hugs you. Sunshine...warm smiles and hugs. Y'did it again. I'd forgotten about this one. Chuckle, sometimes I think I should add myself to my own library! snort. How do you find time to keep track of EVERYBODY? pssst...thank you sy...yer precious to us all--I hope yanno that. and pinache? hmmm...think I should see a doctor about that? *wink* Thank you. Donna, your name suits you so well. I should have called myself "Trouble" or "Hell on Wheels" or in this case? "Late for Supper"! Thanks for reading lovely lady! EA...grinning from ear to ear...I've got balls? EGADS! I knew the hormones were off the chart but that's ridiculous..if I'm growing those there is something else missing besides a link and I'll e mail ya the rest of that rant! Hugs you, with my gratitude. You made my day. sigheyes, it's nice to carry around a vacation spot in your mind, isn't it? I knew you all would understand. Gawd, I LOVE THIS PLACE!!! sigh...thanks again. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) And I don't dare critique this either, as poetry is all about singing like the canary, or the nightingale, or even the vulture, not about some silly anapestic tentameter or anything in that matter! (big hugggssssss) You are a marvelous epitome of creativity, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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