Open Poetry #23 |
Violets |
Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
VIOLETS it was lust, of that we were sure, it could be love but only for one night, you were leaving tomorrow and you would not return~~ I remember the way your voice stroked my style with such attitude, 'hello' from you was seduction, 'hello' from me was permission you brought me violets, they seemed so quaint and oddly out of place in a room filled with silent screams of primal eyefire we did not speak it wasn't necessary, not when following an inevitable course in a moment of hello and goodbye, we mapped our history you, became the explorer I, your geography ~and the violets, were perfect~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I like your unique metaphors and imagery. -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..Sandpiper../\..songlike; i enjoyed; thanks. ../\..Spiros ----------------------calm trees--- |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"in a moment of hello and goodbye, we mapped our history you, became the explorer I, your geography ~and the violets, were perfect~" (smiles) Wow!!! Oh my gosh, this is excellent, it is as if the violet is the apex color of the flame, the kind of love that never maintains to eternity! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandpiper, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I enjoyed this a great deal. It is creative and you captured a very real situation..... I liked the line with the geography in it.. Very good! Thanks, Warm Regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!!!! Fantastic write here! OHMYGOSH! I love this piece! Into my library it goes. ~Hugs~ ~Let your heart guide you... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
And the lily? |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Very sensual and beautiful imagery here. I enjoyed a lot. Dawn |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very beautiful poem, Sandpiper. I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing with us your feelings and thoughts. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
It's the beautiful violets in this poem that make your words all right. Thank you. etoodog [This message has been edited by Robert Adamson (11-11-2002 04:20 AM).] |
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