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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Mélange A mélange of thoughts sways my mind A rampage of sorts stays to blind The river runs in charge too fierce The sea roams to large to pierce. A windmill of wind billows my sail A playbill of breeze willows my bale. The ship lists with rot and wage And ropes fail from brine and age. A steerage by stars mark my night The shadows of light stain the right. And doldrums of naught drains my goal And apathy thwarts my soul The filigree turns to phantoms bale And phantoms turn to wiles of Braille And reaching out in blind mans bluff To sneeze the passage of the snuff The real to me has lost its zeal So now we seek a softer heal. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Good morning Sey.  I see so many things within this piece, it is very artful and this line The real to me has lost its zeal So now we seek a softer heal. speaks so much. well done m'friend. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Sey, Really enjoyed that poem... Thank you for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A melange of meringue! Smiling with a good morning Sy! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautifuil morning write as always Sy, Much enjoyed. ~Morning hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Connel My pleasure thanks for the read and comment. Gentle Spirit A gentle reply, thank you. Sunshine Good morning love.  Enchantress Have a good one, thank you sweet. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sy, thank you for this. I so love reading your poems first thing in the morning. Tea time! Hugs, Marti "I am not afraid of STORMS |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The river runs in charge too fierce The sea roams to large to pierce. ====================== A windmill of wind billows my sail A playbill of breeze willows my bale. The ship lists with rot and wage And ropes fail from brine and age. A steerage by stars mark my night The shadows of light stain the right. And doldrums of naught drains my goal And apathy thwarts my soul The filigree turns to phantoms bale And phantoms turn to wiles of Braille And reaching out in blind mans bluff To sneeze the passage of the snuff =========================================== How am I supposed to pick fave lines when they all are so cool and clever ... so many witty words plays,images, analogies and personifications masterfully wrapped up in your infinite gift of rhyme and cadence.... A windmill of wind billows my sail A playbill of breeze willows my bale. just look at the word play and internal rhymes in these delightful lines and these.... A steerage by stars mark my night The shadows of light stain the right. these will be may WAAAAAY COOL lines for the day... "shadows of light stain the right" Yeppers....youre so KEWL!!!  Now...about that "softer heal"? call 555-tinkerbell  *L**winkiewinkie*   No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Sounds like rough passage....here's to a calmer sea. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
enjoyed this melange of your thoughts very much Charisma |
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dougsbird21 Member
since 2002-11-08
Posts 52London(from TX though) |
hello i don't like alot of rhyming poems...dunno why...but yours is neat! I think it takes talent to write a rhyming one, even though most people are of the opinion rhyming poetry is easier than non-rhyming..I disagree. Also, reading this poem is calming...just the way in which you layed it out. Lisa "Write what you feel, not what u think you should feel." |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Seymour, another good poem with your sweet air of elegance. I love the way you write, Sir. I wish I could write like you. I also love the way you rhyme your words. That's my favorite type of poetry. I personally can understand it a lot better, for some reason. But whatever style you choose, dear friend, would be simply beautiful, I'm sure. Thanks for sharing with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marti, Hugs back and thank you. JM, You always send a delightful reply. That takes me into the sky And there I find a butterfly Winking, winking an eye. What was that number again? WWRS :loveya.RSWells Thank you my friend. Thank you Charisma Lisa, Enjoyed your comment, thank you. garysgirl Thank you for the read and wonderful reply. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Seymour, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you always arrange your thoughts like the desserts on a buffet table and have us all taste a bit of every one, this is gorgeous, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you for the read and bump. Always enjoy your comments. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now just why did this leave me feeling sadness? Doldrums you? Oh heavens I will have to come and liven things up for y'all won't I? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon, Now that would be just lovely. |
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