session 217: these aren't new shoes

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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-11-07 10:17 PM

Domino girl
you're just a little too
emotional.
[I know what this
can/already has lead to].
It's just a movie,
underneath a starry
never ending
hell.
[Where is my universe
going?]
Hurryhurry/hurry[not fast enough].

Intention is what
it all boils down to.
And though the pills are
out of reach,
I do have a doctorate
in saving grace.

Don't cry,
don't protest,
just sit back

and relax.

[But lace up boots
were all the rage!]

What did I tell you,
Domino girl?

It's just a movie.

.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-07-2002 10:19 PM).]

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-11-07 10:20 PM

.... A very good poem. Thank you for sharing.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2002-11-07 10:38 PM

As I said- Brilliant.

I love the way you're always able to bring about so many different voices to your poems. I mean, I know that there's always another voice in people's heads, but I know I cant, for the life of me, bring them out onto paper.
There's a lot of depth to this, not just in the various voices, but the story it tells too. I loved this...

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-11-07 11:06 PM

Domino girl
you're just a little too
emotional.
[I know what this
can/already has lead to].
It's just a movie,
underneath a starry
never ending
hell.
================================

I wish I had the words to tell you
how your words just took mine away....
soul poetry...at its finest.
*hushed awe*

jm

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-11-07 11:12 PM

Well, well, well, who have we here?

As usual your words are brilliant, and you continue to truly amaze me

I hope to see you lurking around here a little more often from now on

I'm so cute!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2002-11-08 11:07 AM

Powerful words, well said.
Sandra

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-11-13 12:29 PM

Jen~
You already know that I love this. I'm just
a little slow getting to my replies..LOL.
Seriously though, I honestly love reading your
poetry because it always makes me think.
Yours is not poetry that one can just breeze through
without feeling it, and that makes great poetry.
Very nicely done, Jen.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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