Open Poetry #23 |
Gone |
Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
Watch me as I'm passing, And you'll see me wave goodbye. Maybe I won't make it, But at least I have to try. I can't see life without you, You have always been a part, Of every dream I've ever had, And each beat of my heart. But, darling, something's missing, No matter how we try. Somewhere in the passing time, We somehow let love die. Until, now, we've only embers, Of what once was so aflame, And passion fades to bleakness, As we play the romance game. So maybe you will miss me, As I am missing you... Perhaps the landscapes of our minds, May be a bluer, blue. So here's my best, you write the rest, As we go on alone- And on the canvas of our lives, Dear, you can paint me...gone. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A very sad write of goodbye. The alone of a relationship gone. Very nicely done. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
That was a very good poem... You are talented... Keep it up my friend... I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
GS I don't believe I have seen this side of your words often, but you have penned a wonderful verse with this write. Very well done. |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
Its a shame how we let love die, isn't it? You have showed an emotional side, but your strength as well. I loved the read. Laura "I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) This is so softly sensitive and heartaching, sweet friend, I hope all is alright as I send angel hugs of comfort your way, this is so well-spoken, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
John, It is indeed sad to see love die. I enjoyed this write though. Dawn |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is so sad, but too true for so many. |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
Excellent. Thank you. etoodog |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Beautiful, but sad. Very well written. Thanks for sharing. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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