Orion - really thrashing winds challenge

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Open Poetry #23

Orion - really thrashing winds challenge

Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

0 posted 2002-11-06 05:54 AM

Somewhere just beyond a beautiful horizon
In the land where time stands still
Sits Orion King of Streaming stays so seated until,
Defending his realm with rings of stone
Wielding Magic learned through skin and bone
Jasons Fleece Dons shoulders strong
Hung proud from Castles walls
Achiles life speaks from tapestries long

He stands tall as Ten
Bending knee for none
Marching out on people who to him are unknown
Killing Monsters, Titans, Men.
Claiming love promised by Gods whom Jealous Stare
Till winter closes this colossus eyes again

Thats 14 lines not 10
a total of 89 words
And none repeated

Take a good look at my face
Well, don't my smile look out of place
look a little closer its easy to trace
The tracks of my tears

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

1 posted 2002-11-06 07:43 AM

Good job, you did it! Three people passed the challenge!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-11-06 07:54 AM

Walter, you met the challenge very well, and with such excellent words. Enjoyed reading.

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-11-06 10:23 AM

Somewhere just beyond a beautiful horizon
In the land where time stands still
Sits Orion King of Streaming stays so seated until,
Defending his realm with rings of stone
Wielding Magic learned through skin and bone
Jasons Fleece Dons shoulders strong
Hung proud from Castles walls
Achiles life speaks from tapestries long
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Not only did you more than meet the challenge..but you did so with impressive use of imagery, theme, rhyme and vocabulary.
Very cool write Poet Paul

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-11-06 11:19 AM

(smiles) Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, and you've done the challenge so very well too, yay! (sigh) You bring the prowess to the heart of Orion, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

5 posted 2002-11-06 04:12 PM

A wonderful job,
you carried it that
extra step.
Well done!

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