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In Response to Wind's Challenge: Koyal Ka Gaana
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In Response to Wind's Challenge: Koyal Ka Gaana |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Strangely soft sweet birds sing All ancient days by melody passed, From parent to child a historic ring Is maintained long recalling the past. Whence this knowledge gained such creatures, Only those that are gone could tell, Yet listen close, picking out features With woven songs of yore speaking spells. Lucsious light lingers everwaiting, Westering sun dips down far sailing. ---------------------------------------------- if i screwed up in regards to the challenge please let me know. challenge: minumum 10 line poem, with 5 words minimum on each line, rhyming, and the clincher is: no repeated words! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I think you met the challenge superbly! This is grand. Enjoyed  |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
.majnu../\..yes, very nice; songlike.. ../\..Spiros --------------------------trees----- |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very soft and beautiful! Challenge well met!  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
It didn't have to rhyme, but you did it! good job, It was indeed a lovely poem. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Majnu, you do have a way with words. Nice poem. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
thank you all for the kind words. ps Rose: give it a couple of days, eh. i'll check yours out here. |
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