Open Poetry #23 |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Like a vacuum’s wand your words snake their way inside sucking out every ounce of mental stability, worming into each and every corner, until in support of sanity only emptiness exists, the finality evidenced by a long woeful wail. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Wow! Don't know if you are merely writing poetry creatively, or, if this is a reality for you. In either case, you have my blessings, (prayers) Hugs to you, and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (11-05-2002 07:47 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yea...that's the way Balladeer and that mean sailor do to me.....(But not nearly so eloquently as you have explained it sweetie) |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
Jellybeans, I have not posted here or anywhere for over 2 years. I have taken a sabbatical of sorts I suppose. Anyway, I am glad I made this my first read. Everyone here should read this work. It is POETRY....not some top ten song with neat little stanzas pretending to be poetry. I like this so very much. Contabo Monami |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is powerful and painful and a poetic punch in the gut! (I almost put paunch, but I really do have to leave alliteration alone occasionally. LOL) |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Oh, insanity is ever so sneaky... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Jellybeans this is deeply powerful and intense writing. Very well done. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Pat, thank you so much, your kindness is appreciated Toe, thank you so much, it is so good to see you at PIP and on my poems Contabo, I am pleased that you are pleased, have been offline today, our internet was down, but will watch for your work as well suthern rofg@your alliteration.....thank you lady for the comments and the smiles Elan how true, thank you for the comments Gentle spirit, thank you so much |
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