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Wounds Reopening |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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I was once wrapped in you. Your moments kissed my own like warm fleece against winter skin. While walking in the wake of we there were no objects to stumble over and now there are all these jagged formations of stone cutting my feet. pity really since I used to be able to walk into you with my eyes closed and know your voice wouldn't bite me the first time I hesitated. This isn't sarcasm or anger. This is my trust in duet with pain a mismatched pair speaking fluently in a garbled colorless language. We are becoming usual and I am less forgiving of it these days. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Jennifer, I could almost feel the sharp rocks under my feet eading this, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and hope soon there is nothing but soft carpets dry-cleaned in faithfulness that you can walk on forever with the love you are so deserving of! (sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is my trust in duet with pain Oh yes, that says so much to me. You write of sorrow in it's truest form. Pity is a fact of life, and I'm pretty much there tonight. Loved your Poem Temptress~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Extremely well done. ThisDiamond |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This isn't sarcasm or anger. This is my trust in duet with pain a mismatched pair speaking fluently in a garbled colorless language. We are becoming usual and I am less forgiving of it these days. =================================== whew...that last line stings like a slap of reality...intense write Poetess Jenn... its wisdom is found in its honesty with an edge...purge on girlie. jm Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"We are becoming usual and I am less forgiving of it these days." A very powerful ending, Jenn. We are becoming "usual"...that just grabbed me. Excellent! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Jenn, I am so sorry to hear of your pain. I hope that in the end all the pain you are having to suffer with right now will vanish as you develop into a beautiful lady once again on your own. I know you are strong and can rise above. Dawn |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
To become "usual" is something that no one should attain to. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I can feel you letting go in this piece, Jen. The look backwards is still painful because you were obviously very much in love. I guess sometimes you still have to let go. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jennifer, this is so beautifully written....but, dear friend, there are so many emotions just flowing out of it......painful emotions. Sweetie, I hope and pray that these feelings you are experiencing will soon be replaced with good feelings from deep inside yourself. I know it hurts, Sweetie, but you have such a loving, sharing heart, and I'm absolutely sure that true happiness and joy will come your way again. I thought I would never find it again, but thank God I have, with my "true Love". Just remember, you have the unending support of all your "family of friends" here at PIP. I wish I had known of all of you when I was going through so much, before I met Gary. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
This poem is a mirror to me i seem to be be on the the wrong side i am the destroyed not nice really not nice Take a good look at my face |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
The part that slams home for me is "pity/really." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Unfortunately, it happens. We build a protective wall around ourselves when we've had enough. Hope all is well, Jen. Corinne |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yep, it looks like the stars are out of someones eyes on this one............ well told.......on to the next one..right? thats amore>>>>>>>>>>>> |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
extremely well said, my friend. And I agree with just about all that was said above... jwesley |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I don't know how i missed this one the other night. These are extremely powerful words, a brilliant finish. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
OMG! I know this so well right now! What an excellent way of writing this! |
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