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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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-ICEMAN He painted an angry bull’s bloodshot eye on his back Saw evil and tried to right it Saw despair and tried to destroy it Each man has a weakness or two . . . or three his was compassion He walked out into unforgiving night that winked orange when clouds strode by The bullseye more visible than ever part of it peeled away by time Three wastes of life dragged their cavewoman by her hair thru their trusted sludge of an alley propped her up against a dumpster Their weapons drawn and aimed they saw the Iceman and his bullseye It was too much to resist but he had already smelled their sin, following them like an invisible noon shadow filling his hand with two Solutions and three Crosses of Salvation Before they could flex their fingers all three Crosses stitched their foreheads He picked up the woman, who asked only “Who is the Iceman?” her hand reaching around his back pulling up the first three sagging letters and holding it to his coat: POL [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (11-03-2002 08:11 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Wow!!! Oh mny gosh, I am speechless after this first read, the bullseye seemed so vivid to me reading this, like it became more bloodshot every second then blinking in the end after the letters were unraveled on his back and letting out a tear! (sigh) I'm going back to read this again as I am speechless of what to say at the moment, this is awesome, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling heart, there is in your writing a deep and abiding echo that lingers in the soul of the reader, so few writers can and do write this fewer do this as well as you do. It is a pleasure to read such well written expressive work. This is an utterly utterly utterly wonderful post. So incredibly well constructed the flow is excellent like a stream of crystal water it refreshes as it strokes the mind. You know when I read your work I’m constantly amazed at how wonderfully expressive it is, its not that I don’t know you are a superb writer it is simply that I am astounded that each and every one of your poems is so brilliantly written. YOU know I love this darling man it is utterly utterly utterly perfect. Don’t ever stop writing such treats please. Give my love to Dulcie and to Batman, tell Dulcie I see far too few of her poems and to send me a link the next time she writes since I have missed her writing too much, as I have missed yours   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a cool poem Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
So very expressive and filled with compassion, Jeff... You have painted a vivid picture here... thanks for sharing it with us  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ShadowRider, what does POL stand for? I understand the vengeance part and the cross stitching  but I don't understand the POL. Very vivid images here, very cool write Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Morning Keth....just fixin' some coffee and thought i would answer real quick: He was wearing a coat that had orange lettering on the back: ICEMAN and the POL had peeled down put them together: POLICEMAN I am not sure that vengence is the correct word, tho, but more an 'obligation' that drew him to find evil. Perhaps he was retired Maybe he just was compelled but the cross stiching was his brand of 'fire' he put inside of them, three bullets that would stop the madness that they spread. [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (11-03-2002 08:14 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent writing, Jeff...you kept me all the way... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ShadowRider~ A thoroughly thought-provoking piece~ Excellently creative thoughts in this one~ *applause* *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well I am certainly glad for your explanation as I had no idea what you were writing about..but Jeff you know me..I have a hard time interpreting deep thoughts *s hugss M |
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