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Pawns, In A Row...
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Pawns, In A Row... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Pawns, all in a row. Sweat beading from nerves as hearts thud mercilessly. Eyes showing the fear. Afraid to step forward, wanting so desperately to.. RUN, run, run away. Yet, running will bring death, certain death, for the grim gallows stand silent in wait. A step forward carries a chance of life, of liberty. The thunderous roar of guns, smoke hazed air, stinging a throat wanting only to scream. Fear quells the waiting cords as silence rings loud against the din of death exploding. So many, mere boys, babes, tears streaming from dirt covered faces still blushing from youth. Stumbling on unsteady legs, legs feeling the weight of a world... Stepping over, around, slipping on crimson colored grass. “Whites of their eyes”, paraphrasing a statement once made. Staring down the dark end of death, waiting for darkness to take the soul, bring peace.. How can one kill when one can only shiver uncontrollably from fear? Iron nerves...only He might possess this will? For they, the mortal, the multitudes, they shivered as countless died from a hail of death falling unseen. Again and again. Forgive me if I seem to be momentarily stuck on a piece of our history.... [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-02-2002 02:51 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whew....you did it...brought me there. so vivid--I feel like you LEFT me there too... um mag? MAG? I wanna go home! (that's what I imagined those boys thinking) this is GOOD. no...EXCELLENT...I smelled sulphur for some reason...wow. pardon me if I go shake this off? shivers and sweat. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Barry, no apologies are needed, for war is still a horror that hasn't diminished in our world today and I only pray for the future generations that these kind of actions can disappear and never again would we be forced to kill countless pawns of our fellow man! (big hugggssssss) This is very striking, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This makes me think of the civil war and the revolutionary, although so much of it could be any way.Although, pawns make me think of those maybe not all that willing for battle, but having it required of them by their 'leaders.' Powerful piece, powerful message. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
I agree with VAS that the Civil War came to mind and the horror of war was tangible and frightening... I cried the whole time at the Arizona...I could still feel it and was overcome with the tears of wives, mothers, sisters, and lovers. You truly wrote this skilled piece with excellence. ( but tha's all I seem to ever find from Magnus..( I am a true fan:supersmile:....) aloha and hugs, Cher Poetry is: |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, I too am in awe of your work. As others said, I felt like I was right there in the "Civil War" (??) with you. You are sooo talented, Sir. Thanks for sharing with us. ~~With Love And Hugs To All~~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
In the pages of sweet release, there is aninimity, and strength. Those stout of heart will never forget. Peace to you my friend...and to all wars. ThisDiamond |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Are you having past-life recall? My gawd, it's as if you brought me right on to the battle field with you! I was born on former battlefields of the War of 1812 and our family homesteads were erected on them. For my whole life I have been seeing and feeling the presence of many of those who perished there during the battles of that war. You're bringing it all back to me--again.... EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (11-02-2002 04:59 PM).] |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
an image, so vivid of the fear of the 'Line' the first to see the blood the first to draw it In ancient times they squared up on a single line, face to face, and in that vein, this mesmerized me, Magnus. JkF |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, well written. In the smoke and the dirt, a hero is the one who can stumble forward and still think of what he's doing there. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah... Red Badge of Courage... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I don't know, others saw the cival war, I saw the Houlocost. Helpless and trembling in fear. In the cival war, they had wepons. Either way, I truely enjoyed it. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling heart, you don’t know how proud I am of you when you write like this. That you can write well I acknowledge, when you write and the emotion is so strong I applaud you, when you do so without having the personal experience or trauma in your life I stand and shout well done. Without doubt you are inarguably a fantastic writer, I can almost smell the blood and taste the fear. This is truly one of your utter utter best. I love this utterly utterly YOU are an amazing writing and this is incredibly well written.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A beautifully written piece, Barry... At first I thought you were playing chess... but that too... afterall, is a war of sorts... depending on the players... But I see that you were describing blood and guts here... and it could be any war any time any place... You vividly expressed those gruesome times, whenever or wherever they were  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
To everyone...thank you....and to me it was the Civil War....though it could have been any number of wars....even the victims of the Holocaust.... |
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