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salty senyru
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salty senyru |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
salty aril, seed coat evidence of former munch peanut flesh, absent ©November 2, 2002 well, I went back down to puny, the size I can barely read, but at least maybe you will all see that my senyru is on 3 lines. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. [This message has been edited by VAS (11-02-2002 05:02 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"aril" is a word I often use in Scrabble because it is easy to fit in and bridge other words. But I like where you're coming from in this delightful senryu! P.S. Perhaps if you used a smaller font, your poem would not spill over into 4 lines. EA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
hmm, it's only 3 on my page, but I can easily remedy for those using a smaller page. Too often, I succumb to a larger font, when I haven't used many words to fill the space. hehehehehe Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I almost see your haiku on three lines but understand we all have different monitors! (kiss on cheek) I love Spanish peanuts and love eating them with the skin as it has a nice salty taste, this is novel and wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Virginia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now I'm hungry....  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I LOVE the way you do this, Virginia. Thanks for sharing. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I don't get it, it is on three lines. Well either way, I loved the poem and enjoyed the image of "Absenece of penut flesh" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Well, Wind, that's because, for one thing you came in after I made it regular size, although, you may have a larger screen, too. No matter, it's small now. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
VAS, a senyru that shows less is more  Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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