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Tonight's menu with conversation
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Tonight's menu with conversation |
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reluctantlyme Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 34 |
Chocolate eclairs, barbecue chips, cocktail for dinner. Did you hear that? Sounded like a voice, sounded so close. Cat must’ve stepped on the answering machine, again. Lots of voices there. Though, no longer any translation from heart to heart. Only stalling dialogue. Impede, delay, throw futile sandbags against a tide that will come as surely as love ends without need of season. Brace yourself, if you think it will help. I’m going out for cigarettes, do you need anything? I won’t be long, be back before it hits. We’ll visit the anesthetic buffet and you can tell me the story one more time. Did I ever tell you, I saw it once in silver-grey smoke drifting toward your sun pierced window? How you’d loved her. Before a breeze dispersed smoke and perhaps a mirror or two. I did, I saw it. You were right to believe. No matter how good looking she is... someone, somewhere is glad she's gone. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Before a breeze dispersed smoke and perhaps a mirror or two. I did, I saw it. You were right to believe."   Wow!!! OH MY GOSH, THIS IS A WONDERFUL DEBUT, this worked as a one-on-one dialogue between yourself and your sunconscious, I LOVE IT!!! Here, this is no anesthetic buffet at all as we all are blessed to have you as part of our poetic family and here may it be a rainbow buffet of inspiration to you, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to this sanctuary. I nearly gagged over that menu. Conversations that drift and separate one from the other are futile exercises, aren't they? Enjoyed the write. I hope you stick around, for there are many who will enjoy your new POV. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Though, no longer any translation from heart to heart. Only stalling dialogue. Impede, delay, throw futile sandbags against a tide that will come as surely as love ends without need of season. Brace yourself, if you think it will help. I'm going out for cigarettes, do you need anything? I won't be long, be back before it hits. ================================ Did I ever tell you, I saw it once in silver-grey smoke drifting toward your sun pierced window? How you'd loved her. Before a breeze dispersed smoke and perhaps a mirror or two. I did, I saw it. You were right to believe. ================================== This is a complex penning of images and emotion..an angsty, even slightly haunting write...with an interesting edge of both bittersweet and sarcasm to it that added to its poetic impressions. Welcome to Poetry Land RM ... I look forward to reading more of your unique style of poetry.  jm Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. John O'Donohue Conamara Blues [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (11-01-2002 09:29 PM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I love the style of your writing, with the double meanings I was able to see two sides to this poem. I loved this part especially and wish I had thought of it Welcome to Passions and i am looking forward to reading more of your work.Though, no longer any translation from heart to heart. Only stalling dialogue. Impede, delay, throw futile sandbags against a tide that will come as surely as love ends without need of season. Brace yourself, if you think it will help. It never helps. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! I very much enjoyed your first post! I'll be watching for more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Exceptional write and presentation. Welcome to Passions. See you again soon. ThisDiamond |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Reluctantlyme ~ Hi, there! This poem manages to be both raw and fresh simultaneously! Now that takes talent to pull that one off! Looking for more of this "good stuff"!!! Earth Angel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
WELCOME to Passions. I very much enjoyed your first post. It was different in a good sort of way. Thanks for sharing with us. I look forward to reading more of your work. With Love To All, Ethel |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
reluctantlyme - Now if your would like to place on the table chocolate eclairs, barbecue chips, and cocktails for dinner never fear, I'll be right over. Now how did you say to get there? BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, this is wonderful. A little Rod McKuen in style, which I love. Hope to see more. Sandra |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yummy..loved it..and welcome!!! hrm..sorry I'm fashionably late... Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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