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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I owe this line to quake who used it to close a poem I use it as an opener. "What language do you use to keep me undefined." I hope it doesn't breach copywrite I asked permission. What language do you use to keep me undefined and shadowed in the half world that we call obsession? It is not the language of love. I have known from you sweet words of nothing; Do not play your romantic Romeo part, it does not become you your language ties me in knots and keeps the restless mind within me forever chained to the shadows where the demons of my past dwell and my desire overcomes my sensibility Do not disarm me with your sweetmeats that are coated in the language of saccharine fake sweetness that poison my will, with corrupt pleasure and leave the bitter aftertaste of passion on my tongue Do not beguile me with the paper lantern promises, that speak of warmth and light while offering nothing more than pretence and destruction in the dark while the bridges of my past are burned in effigy on the wings of darkest desire and I succumb to the hollow words that capture my soul once more Do not pin me in the tapestry of night where my fluttering wings beg silently for release before they bow broken before you, mute forevermore I am caught in the silken web of destruction of my own making as I give power over to you When you spoke I heard what I dreamed and now my dreams have all turned to nightmare dust as I dwell in the shadows of impermanence and faded futility insubstantial in the light that your language entraps me to. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kethry, ~WOW~ .... you are an amazing poet. This is remarkable. Actually, I am speechless. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Kethry, this is fantastic! Very well done! |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Great write Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kethry, this is a very warm and heartfelt poem. There were a lot of emotions within it. Thanks for sharing. Love To All, Ethel |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart what do I say in response to this, nothing for you leave me speechless with envy, blown away by the power and the majesty of your words. Now tell me that you doubt your skill as a writer, now tell me that this is simply something you jotted down in a quiet moment. You cannot expect me to believe that this gem of wonder was not crafted carefully, the words placed within it carefully and precisely. Because beloved heart this is incredible writing, and I love it utterly, it isn’t beautiful, except in its construction, it is sadness and pain written with the pen of a craftsman, or in your case woman. Excellent language usage, the flow utterly perfect and YOU know that I love it. Absolutely wonderful darling heart   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I do believe this to be one of your best, Kethry I love it and can relate to much of it. hugss M |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Many a woman has been sweet-talked into believing what they want to believe to be true. You wrote of this so incredibly well, and you can wager that there will be many who read this, who will be able to identify with your words. Another good write! Linda |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is simply stunning, Keth... I have to agree it's one of your best. And I seem to be doing that a lot lately... could you please share some of that amazing talent! LOL We know people like this... we're swept away by sweet words whispered so easily... and we only hear the falseness in echoes as they walk away. I was truly held spellbound! *S* |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Keth excellent writing it is stunning and very wonderful indeed. This poem is really one of your best. .You never fail to write well and this is outstanding. Beautiful work. Very well written  love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Aye...me thinks this now tops the list of my favorites...of your many wonderful writes my friend....and of my numerous favorites it shares the top....(seems there are so many I cannot pick a single one as TOP DOG...only TOP DOGs... jwesley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Do not beguile me with the paper lantern promises, that speak of warmth and light while offering nothing more than pretence and destruction in the dark while the bridges of my past are burned in effigy on the wings of darkest desire and I succumb to the hollow words that capture my soul once more Do not pin me in the tapestry of night where my fluttering wings beg silently for release before they bow broken before you, mute forevermore ============================== I see you are taking your free verse to new heights Keth-girlie ..this is a very cool write of theme and metaphor...you carried both out to poetic perfection with clever use of vocabulary, turn of phrase and powerful imagery. Well done..take your bows Poetess Keth  mothyme Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Awesome good write, Kethry. Lots of sweet honeyed phrases that will be safe in my favorites file. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The only power others have over us is what we give them. Brilliant writing here, Keth. If you can recognize the signs, then you know what to do about it. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Broken shards of reason crushed beneath my flying feet, turned to dust, blown by the swift wind of my departure into drifting nightmare shapes. I don't need you. Why do I want you? How can this end- without you? Sorry, Keth, you make me write things. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Kethry, this is so well-written, sweet friend, so many can relate to the poignancy your words display and of what truly is sweet or not! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is remarkable, Keth... The truth spoken so poetically  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
regards2you, thank you so much for the wow. Whenever I write I worry that my words will not reach out to people. It seems you prove me wrong everytime. Denise, thanks for the fantastic. When you respond as you do it helps me to see that perhaps I have some small talent and I am not just whistling down the wind. Bernie, thank you for the praise garysgirl, Thank you free verse is not my forte but I dabble sometimes when I have a thought that can't be contained any other way. Er... Mushy it was jotted down in a moment when I read this other fabulous poem. Howver I did tighten it up on a different site. This is the original without changes and very cliched. nakdthoughts, thank you so much, coming from one who excels in free verse (you) it warms my heart to think this piece has touched you in some way. Earth Angel, you are right and many more will. Thank you for seeing beyond the words suthern, I don't know that it is as much talent as a fortunate falling of words on the paper...and they make such a pretty pattern Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krissy, if you like it I am blessed indeed, thank you for showing me the joy in free verse. jwesley, thank you for the email address, you are now firmly locked in my address book and you will never be free of me. Thank you also for your wonderfully warm words, it's people like you who give people like me the incentive to continue writing. JM, why is it when you quote my words back to me they take on a magic that only a true poetess can give, there is wonder in your writing, so I am pleased to have come to your notice. Midnitesun isn't it always the way to hear honeyed phrases that are cloyingly sweet and leave an aftertase of something else Balladeer, You are right as usual and yet so often what we know has no effect whatsoever on what we do. Pilgrimage, you finished my thought....perfectly, thank you Noah, in the sweet sweepstakes -you win hands down. Thank you once again for your constant presence in response to my work. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lyra, I could never thank you enough for your friendship and your encouragement, but I am going to try. Thank you lovely lady. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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