Open Poetry #23 |
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Before it Seeps |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Way too sing-songy, but, I think it at least says what the weather's doing today. Before it Seeps gustery, blustery, then seconds of calm; rain on the wind an autumn balm. the dry, parched earth, in shock, rock hard, in nonsense stands to hold its guard. confused, it lies, as puddles burst through the crust to quench its thirst. in heavenly joy, it heaves a sigh, thankful to God for sweet cloud’s cry., to drink it in as deep can be before it seeps down to the sea. ©October 29, 2002 Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
What a wonderful way to describe an Autumn rain!!! Loved it!! Pen how you truly feel... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is such a beautiful poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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bslicker![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
i think u did a great job of the Pooh Day!!!! opps maybe everyone don't know the Pooh Bear.. ah sure they do enjoyed Bernie ![]() A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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~K Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 104 |
I liked it! I bet it would be gorgeous put to music! |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I too heard a hosanna in these words and that is a good thing because I love song lyrics too! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Virginia, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thanks for all of your encouraging comments! I am still working many days, praise God and Hallelujah! Right now I can barely stay awake so I think I'd better do my last minute things and hit the sack. I have just a half-day tomorrow so maybe I can get here more to comment. Virginia Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Virginia, I love the way you can write on any subject and make it seem so real. thanks for sharing your work. Love to All, Ethel |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
Excellent description and very fluid. I liked every drop. Thank you. etoodog |
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