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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2002-12-06 10:17 PM

"You’re in the way,"
And gibberish,
Fast favors,
And king-sized fish.

Stomach pokes,
And backward walks,
Not-quite-cold,
And way-home talks.

Marshmallows,
And Don’t-do-thats
Tears and fears,
And crazy cats,

Pacing all about
And monkeys made of fluff,
It’ll all be better,
Quickly enough.

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This won't make any sense to anyone but the person it's dedicated to, and it's not even a good poem, but it's at least something vaguely poetic. The last stanza is horribly off on the syllable structure, but I wrote the thing during a rather...upset...mood, and I don't feel like going back to fix it.

To Vanny, even though I know you probably don't know that PiP exists, I wish I could make everything stop. I love you.

-Adam

[This message has been edited by Kosetsu (12-06-2002 10:18 PM).]

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-12-07 12:29 PM

*hugs you tight*
It's beautiful, Adam, it really is

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2002-12-07 12:59 PM

Your right it doesn't make sense to me, but there were still parts I liked, because Im strange and I'll like stuff I don't understand.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

3 posted 2002-12-07 03:24 PM

Eh guess i dont get it because frankly I dont write the same kinda of style. Metaphores are not my strong point :-/

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

4 posted 2002-12-07 04:30 PM

Hey, if everyone tried to make sense of the fluff monkeys they wouldn't be here.Good job...I guess.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

5 posted 2002-12-08 12:26 PM

That's just it....there's no metaphors. No lovely little twists of the English language. Just memories...

-Adam..

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-12-08 08:55 AM

Mmm...Adam, I wanna talk about this...

Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet...

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