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! HURT !
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! HURT ! |
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michaels_gurl New Member
since 2002-11-25
Posts 6 |
The fist is full of rage, the eyes with anger, Hostility is within the mind. And the heart holds all the fear and wonder, The body overflows with emotions. Emotions of anger, fear, love, frustration and confusion, The heart wonders if it is going to be broken again. It fears to ever trust again, fears to ever care again, And fears to ever love again. The mind screams, "I can't take it anymore!" The eyes just cry. If it wasn't for God the sould would be lost. "Why does everything have to be so hard?" you ask. Nobody knows. But I do know that when you have been heartbroken...... IT HURTS!!! |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
This reads much like a journal entry. Casey |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
I agree with Casey and also, the all caps thing was kinda a bam in my mind.. it hit and it hurt....  ok riley Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
it is true, this is a very emotional piece. but i think that using pink font takes away from the effect. perhaps black would be a better choice. in arial. visuals are also important when it comes to poetry. good write and thanks for sharing. /jen/ 'i don't care if it hurts, i want to have control. i want a perfect body, i want a perfect soul.' [radiohead] |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
That was a very amazing piece. You really have a lot of talent! I'll be looking for more of yours. WinterWren |
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