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lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
Plummeting downward like a sinking ship, life's threats are beginning to tear and rip. Hopelessness begins to tire on ambition, the situation is no longer premonition. You shudder alone in this empty room, repressed ideas haunt and loom. Please listen to the truth to be told. Sit and listen to a story that is cold. Take the words up like a dry sponge within your concience like a filming grunge. Life is full of little ruts and bumps, hard knocks, bruises, beatings and lumps. You must go through the bad to get to the good, be brave and the meaning will be understood. I feel concerned when life goes wrong. Maybe the bumping road won't seem as long if you take my words and learn to care instead of hiding beneath a cynical stare. For a friend I will try to be, honourable, loyal and caring you will see [This message has been edited by vlraynes (11-25-2002 03:53 PM).] |
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lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
oops...my eyes deceived me. there should be a break after the first comma. -Joe |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Joe~ A nicely written piece you have here. I very much enjoyed reading this.  I went ahead and fixed your line breaks for you too. For future reference, you can edit any of your posts within 24 hours of posting them, by clicking on the 'edit' icon at the top of your text area. It's the third icon from the left. I hope that helps. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (11-25-2002 04:01 PM).] |
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