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Someone Come and Hold Me
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Someone Come and Hold Me |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Someone come and hold me, Before I fall asleep; I don’t want to dream my dreams And I can’t take the leap. I can’t bring myself to face the ledge That I’m slipping towards, And I can’t seem to break away From these tight’ning cords. And even as they wind themselves About my gasping chest, I just can’t seem to rid myself Of this emotional arrest. So someone come and hold me, While I’m still awake, Cause I’m slipping towards the ledge, And my rope’s about to break. ----------------------------- Even worse than the last one...*sighs* -Adam |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*poke* is not bad  No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
This poem made me ache. It was not bad. I rather liked it, actually. Kielo |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I don't think its bad at all, maybe some of your others were better, but this still gave me the chills. You are very talented Adam, sometimes I think you can read my thoughts and spin them into poetry....Great Job! ~Lisa P.S. Nice to see you back around the Blue, I've missed the way your poetry always brought tears to my eyes And this little masochist, she's ready to confess |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, i really liked this  especially the last part cant wait to read more "sometimes i just feel like |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
we are our worst critic. and it's always better to be writing something than nothing at all. i thoroughly enjoyed it. good write and thanks for sharing.  /jen/ i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now. |
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lildevil Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 47missouri,usa |
((HUGS)) ITS ALOT BETTER THAN YOU THINK |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I'll admit, your previous work has left me more awstruck than now. But this is still enjoyable! ^_^ Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
why do you say that!? you don't give yourself much credit..  Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Adam~ I agree with the others. This is not bad at all. On the contrary, I thought it was quite good. There is a lot of emotion wrapped in these words, and you've expressed it very well and quite powerfully. Good to see you posting again. I'll be watching for more.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
What r u talking about...bah....blah!! This isnt bad at all silly!!! I really liked this..i can relate to it actually so i thank you for that..i love poems i can relate to. Thanks for sharing Standing on the edge of the world |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
adam dear i miss talking to you give me a buzz on yahoo sometime or email me sometime dear! *hugs* robin you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oh ive missed you! i really really liked this. especially the last stanza. excellently put together. you're brilliant and you know it XOXO-Kiley **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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