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k2tomtom21k New Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 9 |
i'd really like to get some response and critiques In the end… 10.29.02 imagine a world: W. and his army, and the Dems as well, Green party, Red Party, No Party- Died, vanished, disappeared, Would we be lucky to inhabit such world? After all, in the end, It’s just you, me And the rest of humanity….. - jimmy marble and ps: is it against the law to use bad language in poems? because i wrote one last night that i'm partial to, but i hesitate to post it due to some language that may or may not be appropriate |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
well from experience bad language is not really a good idea while posting because there are little eyes. i dont know much about american govnt so i cant comment on that, but it seemed like an ad more then a poem. actually i read it over again and i liked your last few lines a great deal Regina [This message has been edited by Ina (11-20-2002 09:05 PM).] |
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k2tomtom21k New Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 9 |
i'm just glad that you knew it was about the american government, half of my creative writing class had no idea what i was talking about in this poem. THanks for the response, you're boss! love, jimmy |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
k2tomtom21k- This is an interesting write...thought provoking. I find it a bit unsettling that such a large percentage of your creative writing class didn't realize what the poem was about. In case I haven't welcomed you yet... Welcome to Passions.  I look forward to reading lots more from you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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