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The Lonely One
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The Lonely One |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"The Lonely One" (19/11/02) © 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved Verse 1 Sitting on the corner every morning Singing songs with his guitar, You can tell by his tears the stories true He sings them with a scared heart. While endless struggles dance upon his face Like shadows in the morning sun, From people passing him by on the street He's known as the lonely one.... Verse 2 I watch him from my window every morn' Counting pennies from his hat, I wonder where it all went wrong for him Why he's forced to live by rats. Why between old trashcans he pulls his strings Singing 'bout losing each run, With closing curtains and bottles of blues He's known as the lonely one... Bridge 1 One day the lonely one was gone, He died of heart problems they said. But his message do still read strong, It's something I will never forget. He's used to sing.... Verse 3 You're too judgmental, 'bout the suits we wear, Put those judging eyes to rest. Sit down, think about, everything 'cause it's, No popularety test. So what, if I am, caught in lifes gutter, At least I still carry a smile. So what, if you have. all money can buy. It'll only last awhile... Bridge 2 All we really are is inside, The outside's just a carmuflage. Don't matter where we sleep at night, A rich man's bed or in the trash. He used to sing.... And a man couldn't be more right. 'Bout everything.... The lonely one.... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Brian~ I really like this one. You are definately growing in your writing, and I'm enjoying reading your work. I love the feel of this one and the overall message is a very powerful one. Keep up the good work.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Wow, I was hit hard by the message. Took me off guard, how extremely well penned it was, and how quickly it got to me. Whoa. Ok, well back to this. I agree, you have grown quite a lot from when you first started ( then again haven't we all  )Anywho, Good job. Riley ~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~ |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
 What You Can't Have- You Can't Resist |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Brian, this was very nicely written. i liked the concept. keep writing regina |
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