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"Missing You Tonight"
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"Missing You Tonight" |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Missing You Tonight Here I sit alone in my bed While visions and thoughts of you danced in my head. I’m missing you tonight It would make me so happy just to have you in sight I think that I’m missing your smile the most I would do anything just to hold you close. Being away from you for days is just too much It’s because you have that magic touch. The stars are in the sky They cannot compare to the diamonds in your eye, And the full moon is peeking out Please give me a chance to see what true love is about. Well my eyes are beginning to shut So I guess I have to say Goodnight These feelings will continue to grow like the deepest cut As you are the one that I’m missing tonight. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
oh, I like how the first couple lines are a distant reference to "the night before christmas." Helps to give the reader an idea of what to expect in terms of style... The rest of the poem has a lot of interesting mixed imagery, such as the moon peeking out and asking what true love is about... that was neat.  Welcome to Passions in Poetry. Hope you have fun reading, replying and sharing with the rest of us in here. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Crysania Member
since 2002-09-21
Posts 67Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!) |
I like the 'Night Before Christmas' lines too! Very nice, m'dear, very nice.Blessed Be! Stephanie Do what you want and say what you feel. Those who matter won't mind and those who mind don't matter. (Forget who said that...must find their name.) |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
 Welcome to Passions! Nice first post, sweetpoet. You've done a fairly good job with the rhyme but you're new so I wont pick too badly.  Remember to reply as well as post around here. Thanks for joining and I look forward to seeing your name around the board. ~AF~ Don't steal - the Government hates competition. |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Nice first post * sits down with book * Twas the night before, o forget it, I'll just say I liked the reference and sound like I'm copying.... Riley ~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~ |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
Welcome to Passions! This was a good first post. Hope you like it here. Laura "I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful." |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
A touching tribute to someone very missed. Welcome to Passions and please check your e-mail for a special greeting. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
O yea.....I fordot.  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!!!!!!! I am the worlds formost expert on exclamation points. LOL. WELCOME ONCE AGAIN! Exclamation ~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~ |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Welcome Welcome Welcome! I loved the poem...Cant wait to see more of u!  *Allison* |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
welcome, this was a good first post i really liked it  that smilie prolly has no reason to be there but i always wanted to put it in a reply so i figured now's as good a time as ever, enough rambling good write ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sweetpoet16m4u04~ Welcome to Passions!  I very much enjoyed this first post, and I look forward to reading lots more from you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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