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anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

0 posted 2002-11-09 12:23 PM

For the end,
read the beginning,
don't you know energy never dies,
it simply shifts from form to form.
The cycle of us will begin again
just on a slightly different slant,
that's all.
I can't wait to see what we will become,
what we will melt and merge into this time.
So it's time to be reborn once again
and once again it's just a change a state,
whats most important will stay the same

[This message has been edited by anya (11-09-2002 03:00 PM).]

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

1 posted 2002-11-09 02:08 PM

Anya I absolutly loved the first two lines, great poem, I like what is had to say. Its one of those poems where, like it or not, you had think and contemplate..

Good Job,
Lisa

sjh
New Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 8
Bucks., England

2 posted 2002-11-09 03:30 PM

anya,
I'm impressed. It's a strong metaphor and you use alliteration to good effect throughout the poem.
Nice one,
Stuart

dougsbird21
Member

since 2002-11-08

Posts 52
London(from TX though)

3 posted 2002-11-09 06:40 PM

Hi

Really nice poem! Good flow to it.

So you're in London huh? Me too! I have lived here for about 1.5 yrs now...moved here from Texas to be with my now husband. I'm 22...u? Do u ever go to places that have poetry readings and stuff? I've heard of the Poetry Cafe but haven't been. NEway, I'd really like to meet some people here...specially people with my interests!! Email me sometime-might be nice to get to know one another! [email protected]

Lisa

"Write what you feel, not what u think you should feel."

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-11-10 01:25 AM

Anya...

I love your use of scientific terminology, even when it was less profound, like "melts..." Really helped the whole "changing states" concept come through.

I personally didn't like the first couple of lines, but Lisa did, so... who am I to talk?

See you around.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

5 posted 2002-11-10 05:35 AM

Thanks for the responses guys

Dougsbird, yes I am in North london, I've never been to any poetry readings though,

Anya

[This message has been edited by anya (11-10-2002 05:38 AM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-11-14 02:46 PM

anya~
I'm liking this piece very much.
I agree with LP...your word choice is very
effective and really helps to give a nice
flow to the poem. Loving the message it conveys as well.
Very nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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