Teen Poetry #6 |
Fate |
ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
These nights have grown long Filled with loneliness and reflection Doing my best to stay strong Desperatly needing some affection Travelling down this lonely road Ain't seeing any signs of light Carrying an unforgiving load In time this road shall be bright Hidden within a shadow Simply scared to take a chance Suffering by myself though Caught my eye at first glance Can't conceal how I feel The loss would be too great This feeling is so surreal To be with you is my fate |
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BabyGirl721 Junior Member
since 2002-11-07
Posts 12California, USA |
Hey! Great poem. You have a great way of expressing yourself. I can kinda relate to some of the things you mentioned in that poem. Keep up the good work. |
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Faye Junior Member
since 2002-11-04
Posts 14The world of Dreams&Memories |
"Can't conceal how I feel The loss would be too great" How can you love in silence.? |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
I can say I thouroghly enjoyed this piece. I could relate to it you know I went through some of this stuff with my girfriend: "Hidden within a shadow Simply scared to take a chance Suffering by myself though Caught my eye at first glance" That was pretty much how it was I was scared to talk to her at first but I still thaught she was beutiful. Anyway... This was a very good poem I hope to read more in the future. Darkness |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
"In time this road shall be bright Hidden within a shadow" My two fav lines in this one. Great job! Nice images, I love that. Laura "I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful." |
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