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foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

0 posted 2002-11-06 07:11 PM

Lonliness is a pain.
I know that now that I don't have you.
From what of it do you gain?
I can't stand not to see you.
Everyday you were here with me.
Now everday we're not together.
Never again will you kiss me.
I have to live with it now.
Without you here.
But i ask myself "how?"
As from my eye falls a salty tear.

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (11-07-2002 06:58 PM).]

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2002-11-06 07:17 PM

ok here it goes ppl!!!I dont know if u will like this but its title is a dave matthews song!!isnt that kewl!!!anywayz hope yall like it

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2002-11-06 07:21 PM

OK, if you want a little message put it at the bottom of ur poem on the new topic page thing please, its just a pet peeve of mine. Erk....ok sorry. I kinda liked this. I mean I don't rhyme anymore. But its good.

Riley

~*Pain strikes my heart, water drips down my face, I now stand in front of you, full of shame and disgrace*~

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

3 posted 2002-11-06 07:27 PM

oh lol ok maybe i will do that now

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (11-06-2002 09:39 PM).]

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2002-11-06 09:23 PM

I liked it. I liked the wording. Good one!
*Allison*

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

5 posted 2002-11-06 09:31 PM

OMG!! PEEVE IS A REALLLLY COOL WORD... what she meant, cathy.. is that she rather you put what you replied IN your poem, instead of replying your own topic.. ya kno!?
lol.. at least I THINK that's what she meant..

I like this.. you kno what it reminded me of, cath??

OMG.. but when i wuz takin his glasses off- i was freakin out- cuz he closed his eyes, and yea- but about 3 seconds after i freaked out- i figured i was pulling his hair on accident.. cuz i mean--- jon, ya know? come on.. jon wouldn't... ya know.. would he? right? (if i catch my drift. lol)
CAT BOXES!!!

ahhhhah!

good write man... i like.. (lol)

!sara!

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-06-2002 09:36 PM).]

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

6 posted 2002-11-06 09:35 PM

Yea, like you reply to your own topic with the little message, it annoys the crap out of me, ya know. Just like leave a message a couple of spaces down from the poem itself when you type it. Thankies. Just a peeve.

Ri

~*Pain strikes my heart, water drips down my face, I now stand in front of you, full of shame and disgrace*~

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

7 posted 2002-11-06 09:43 PM

Ri- sry didnt think it would but the crap out of anyone i will do that now LOL

allison-thanx

Sara-how can i forget catboxes?? i keep bringing it up man!!!

THANXXXXXXXXXXX

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

8 posted 2002-11-07 04:46 AM

Booya! Love the last line especially!

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

9 posted 2002-11-07 03:08 PM

i like the whole salty tear thing
good write
~sam~

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

10 posted 2002-11-07 07:57 PM

I liked this poem and the last line's imagery speaks very powerfully to me. Great Poem!!

-Jeanette-

Alone Afraid n' Away
Junior Member

since 2002-10-28

Posts 19

11 posted 2002-11-11 06:30 PM

Cathy this poem was really great! I hope you go against your word and continue if you don continue ill have to cry!

OMG I can't wait to see 8 MILE, Amanda is the Kewlest!

Sweetpoet16m4u04
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

12 posted 2002-11-11 07:16 PM

I really enjoyed this write. The imagery in it is great. I just got done feeling in a way just like this. It's tough to overcome but once you do there are many other great things to come.
Chris

rimmie
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 45
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

13 posted 2002-11-11 09:22 PM

I really liked it!...it sounded ummm...

...REAL thats the word!!! I thought you ended it nicelly!

Great Job

~RuZ~

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