Teen Poetry #6 |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
In the dim and fading light the first sign of the enemy brings terror to all that hear the high pitched saws scythe the air as the screaming machine gun beats tearing the hidden scars asunder of old wounds left on the heart from the battles of yesterday Andrew it’s not your makeup that fades |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Powerfully written, Andrew. I cannot see any sort of reasoning behind violence to solve problems in regards to war. For such a short piece you've got some amazing images popping up here. Thanks for the read. Looking forward to more. ~AF~ "No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Hi, Andrew~ I really enjoyed reading this piece. I'm seeing a lot of depth in this and there is definately more than one way to interpret it. Of course, you already knew that, didn't you? Very well written, my friend. You are a talented poet. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-20-2002 01:40 AM).] |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the replies and yes I did intend to have the two interpretations although I'm not sure that it has worked that well in this peice, anyway I enjoyed reading your comments Andrew it’s not your makeup that fades |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I like how you open by mentioning beginnings, and close by saying that these things are the "battles of yesterday." I might be a bit off, but I saw this as speaking towards the notion of war as something unending, reoccuring. That what occurs yesterday will catalyze what will occur tomorrow, and that war is much the same. I'm not sure if that's what you were driving at... perhaps some more people will have a take on this. I'm but a humble fan. Wombles, Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
<----- all I have the time or energy for, sorry. Well done, Andrew. Sincerely, Titus "I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come." |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
wow. one of the best descriptive pieces i've read in days. it truly did take me to a place i never wanted to go. excellent write zu. [thought it was worth bringing back up] /jen/ i just haven't been the same since that house fell on my sister. |
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