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Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-10-28 07:52 PM

Tiny pools of crystal tears
In which my paper of sorts falls
Darkening the already black ink
To where it disguises all other content
And you can’t read the fear behind it
As it masquerades to throw you off track
You can almost smell the rotted lies
Sliding off the crumpled papers
That I hold beneath my recorded fingerprints
Also telling the unknown to everyone
Through unjust pens that sparkle with trustless behavior
Written rumors sent from the exact tip
In which I hold with trembling doubts
Tied together in water splashed around
By deception flossed fingernails
Hung together by the art
With the eyes that read all untruths that fall out
And they believe every pitiful word of mockery

~*I'm not gonna say I'm gorgeous, that for you to decide, if you really wanna know me, see the world through my eyes*~

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2002-10-28 10:08 PM

Very vivid. Nice discriptions of deception...enjoyed this.

6

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-29 03:14 PM

This is beautiful. The imagery is absolutely stunning and in every way appropriate to the poem's actual meaning.

Excellent work, Riley.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2002-10-29 09:57 PM

Thanks everyone for replying....Brian I actually got inspired for this by one of your comments on a poem about a love letter falling out of a locker. Thanks eveyone again.

Ri

~*I'm not gonna say I'm gorgeous, that for you to decide, if you really wanna know me, see the world through my eyes*~

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

4 posted 2002-10-29 10:01 PM

This poem moved me, I loved this very much.

YOUR INSULTS AND YOUR CURSES MAKE ME FEEL LIKE IM NOT A PERSON ~Staind~

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

5 posted 2002-10-29 10:06 PM

thought that this poem was kewl hope to see a lot more from u

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

6 posted 2002-10-29 10:58 PM

I know deception all too well....

Riley, nice to read you again! I haven't been around much these past few weeks. Hope things are going well for you. Keep writing.

--Beth

Howl at the stars, whisper when you're sleeping, I'll be there to hold you, I'll be there to stop the chills and all the weeping.

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